Len Gasun Poet Rhyme

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My Honey Babe

You are not as sweet as honey anymore,
I wish you will evaporate just like a water vapor;
You only love your bottle of whisky or your liquor,
Don’t give me a kiss, you stink! I’ll slam the door.

Pack your things and walk out,
For the first time I can be hysterical… I’ll scream and shout;
You cannot take care of me as I wanted to be stout,
Like my idol Betty Boop whose lips are so luscious when pout.

I bought  this house for you and for me,
All day and night I worked hard…now, I’m so skinny;
You said, you had contributed a thing here, I don’t agree,
Just your one and only nail on the wall, am I happy?

Tonight, I will give you your last chance,
But keep yourself away from me at ten-meter distance;
Drink those perfumes then give me the last dance,
Before you’ll sleep naked on the floor and forget me babe, not hon.



May 25, 2014       6.40pm

Second Place
Contest: Slamming Season
Judged: 6/17/14
Sponsor: My fave poet, PD


Third Place
Contest: Slam The Slam
Judged: 8/28/14
Sponsor: My Beloved Poet Skat

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Casarah Nance August 29, 2014 at 9:16 PM Great slam, I loved the flow. grats on your win ;) Len Gasun September 5, 2014 at 11:44 AM Thank you so much my dear friend Casarah. Congrats on your many wins as well. Big sweet hugs!

Dr.Ram Mehta August 29, 2014 at 6:44 AM Fantastic and a great win, Leo. congrats Len Gasun September 5, 2014 at 11:44 AM Thank you so much my dear Dr. Ram. Many congratulations on your win as well. Biggest hugs!

Skat A August 28, 2014 at 11:27 AM Way to let them have it Leonora, Congratulation, on your awesome win. Thanks for the support. Loving ~SKAT~ Len Gasun August 30, 2014 at 11:41 AM ;))))Thank you so much for the honor, win and especially for appreciating/approval of my slam poem my dearest Skat! In fact, i've already forgotten this contest;))). Thank you, thank you so much and I'm so glad to see you back. Biggest sweet and warm hugs to you! I'll be back soon. Good night and God bless!

Ifeanyi Bob Ekechukwu July 19, 2014 at 3:56 PM Hey dear you are really talented in bringing out tots into written words. I really enjoyed and followed this poem to the last. Congrats on your win and know am proud of you dearest friend and love. Big hugs to you and I miss you Len Gasun August 30, 2014 at 11:32 AM Super belated thank you for this very wonderful comments my dear friend Bob! Huge sweet hugs! Len Gasun August 30, 2014 at 11:26 AM Super belated thank you for this very wonderful comments my dear friend Bob! Huge sweet hugs!

John Michaels July 10, 2014 at 3:44 AM That's told him not to get on the wrong side of you! Congrats on your win! Len Gasun July 20, 2014 at 10:23 AM Belated many thanks my dear friend John! More blessings! Hugs!

Cecilia Macfarlane June 18, 2014 at 10:19 PM Lenora, you sure told him! Terrific slam and win! Hugs Len Gasun July 1, 2014 at 8:12 AM Thank u so much my dear friend, Cecilia. Hugs back at u.

Paul Callus June 18, 2014 at 2:46 PM See...your experimental poem served you well!!:) Congratulations on a top placing, Leonora! // paul Len Gasun July 1, 2014 at 8:14 AM Thank u so much my very dear friend Paul.

Ray Dillard June 17, 2014 at 9:01 AM Congratulations, Lenora , on your placement in the Slam" Len Gasun June 18, 2014 at 9:26 AM Thank you so much my dear friend Ray. Big hugs!

Pandita Sietesantos June 17, 2014 at 8:09 AM Congratulations on a well-deserved win, Leonora. Kindest regards! Len Gasun June 18, 2014 at 9:28 AM Thank you so much my dear friend Pandita. Kindest regards as well. I'll visit you soon ok. Big hugs!

Arlene Smith June 17, 2014 at 6:02 AM Congrats on a great win, Leonora!! Hugs.. Arlene..

Poet Destroyer A June 17, 2014 at 12:52 AM hello My Sweetest SIS... Leo, Loving this one again. I knew it looked familiar..... Congratulations:) Thank you for the Slam Season Support... Stop by and enjoy my newest poem "Dear Mr President" OR my latest blog "Prettiest Poet Girl" if you like. No pressure. :):):) Hugs & Love ~Always & Forever~ your BFF LINDA Len Gasun June 18, 2014 at 9:34 AM Hi, My Sweetest SIS as well & dearest BFF of mine. Biggest sweetest hugs from me to u. Thank you so much for my great win and and especially for your approval on my slam poem. I didn't expect to get high place here but I did it . Now I know, I can write a slam poem :)))). Thank u ty so much. God bless. tcare always my forever sis-BFF.

Skat A June 8, 2014 at 8:29 AM ha-ha, hope your Honey Babe, understands... Love this...SKAT Len Gasun June 14, 2014 at 8:13 AM ha ha. he must understand & be more considerate to me my dearest sis & friend Skat; otherwise, my endearment "babe" will be taken away next ;)))) at least he is still my loving babe ;)))) thank u so much for stopping by & enjoying this fictional poem of mine.

Paul Callus June 4, 2014 at 11:22 AM Hi Leonora! I'm sure this experiment is going to leave some positive results. I would call it a witty slam where you slammed with dignity. gl // paul Len Gasun June 14, 2014 at 8:17 AM Thank u so much for the very nice compliment my dear friend Paul. Just trying my best to participate in my dearest friend and poet sis' contest. tytysssm... biggest hugs!

Phyllis Babcock June 2, 2014 at 8:25 PM That is the way lay down the law to this honey babe. This one made me smile for we probably know a person like this. I hope you are feeling better. Thanks for all your comments. love phyl Len Gasun June 4, 2014 at 8:09 AM I'm happy and grateful for your visit my dear friend Phyllis and your wonderful comments on my poem. I'm doing better now. I was in relentless pressure for the past few days due to additional workload in school. God bless and have a nice day! Big hugs to u!

Arthur Vaso May 30, 2014 at 10:25 PM A very powerful and expressive poem, great write!! Len Gasun June 4, 2014 at 8:10 AM Thank you so much for that wonderful comments my dear friend Arthur. Hugs!

Lena Emp May 27, 2014 at 11:34 PM This is a story of love and hate, great expression of your feelings through poems. Though sad but there is hope and chance at the end. Great one. Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 9:54 AM Thank u so much for that nice comments my dear friend lena. This is only a fiction and I created it for the contest and for fun at the same time;)))). Hope I did it right. TYSM again. Big hugs!

Ken Carroll May 27, 2014 at 6:50 PM Strongly expressed my friend..You are woman I hear you roar..Nice one Leonora! Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:40 AM No offense for males please.....Big hugs! Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 9:57 AM ;)))))Yes, I was roaring in this fiction which I created for the contest and for fun at the same time my dear friend Ken. Thank u so much for the nice comments and your precious time as well. Big hugs!

Ravi Sathasivam May 27, 2014 at 7:00 AM Powerful write. Well penned. Enjoyed. Tfs Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 9:58 AM Thank you so much my dear friend Ravi. Big hugs!

Nette Onclaud May 26, 2014 at 7:32 AM i really digg tjhis, lory.. love the fierce take on the theme, wow.. good to know you are fine in bkk.. ohh, a coup?.. so, we heard.. stay well and let's find that chance to meet up soon.. finally, it rained for an hour here...huggss Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:01 AM Thank you so much my dear friend Nette. Updated news here now is the curfew up to 10pm. Oh, thanks God it rained in Phil. Ok, take care. Big hugs!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 25, 2014 at 3:43 PM hahahha :) i love the line with betty boop that made me giggling.. then 2nd: the last line.. :D hahhaha i like that.. :D it's both witty, hilarious poem but well definitive with the thought to slam that man on his head lools.. :D GBU love and hugs.. :D Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:10 AM ;)))))) thank you so much my dear friend Olive for the wonderful comments.:)))))I'm glad you caught my naughtiness on some lines.;)))) esp. the one you mentioned. You're smart. This is a fiction I created for the contest and for fun. Hope I did it right. TYSM again. Big hugs!

Poet Destroyer A May 25, 2014 at 8:49 AM PS..... I like how you handled this. A nice clean slam, soup style. Slamming the affairs of a person, instead of the person indeed... Xool Idea... I love this.... Always & Forever.. Your sis & BFF.... Linda Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:15 AM :))). I'm so happy you read my poem ahead of time my dearest sis. Thank u thank u so much. I just tried to make a slam poem for your contest and I did it for fun. Hope I did it right and I Hope no offense for the males;))))

Poet Destroyer A May 25, 2014 at 8:46 AM ha ha, I love this experiment poem... My sis... I am here right now, I'll be here for another hour or so.... Miss you my BFF... Thank you for yesterdays comments and visits... Linda Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:26 AM Many many lovely hugs and kisses! Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:21 AM ;))))))))Thank you so much my dearest sis. Hope I did my experimental slam poem right. But ops, I miss u so much and I'm so sorry, I've missed your presence here last 25th. Hope I came back here after posting a poem even if I got busy/engrossed with my paintings. Miss u my dearest sis. I'll visit you soon. TYSM again.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 25, 2014 at 8:14 AM - Powerful slam !!!! - throw him at the door :)) - Happy time is gone ..... - very well written dear Leonora. - Have a fine Sunday - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:31 AM ;)))) ha ha ha. thank u so much my dearest friend Anne Lise, but I already slammed the door. Perhaps on the window. I'must kidding. This is just a fiction for contest. I imagined my boyfriend (who's a soldier & drink sometimes:))) if he will be like this. But he is a very good guy. Hope no offense of males. TYSM & big hugs!

Tim Smith May 25, 2014 at 7:57 AM Great slam Leonora...Many men get to comfortable in a relationship and take a woman for granted..Good luck in the contest...hugs Tim Len Gasun May 28, 2014 at 10:37 AM Thank you so much my dear friend Tim for the nice comment and your precious time. You maybe right but maybe only few men:))). Hope no offense for guys 'cuz this is a fiction created for the contest and for fun. Just trying to write a slam poem ;) Big hugs!