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My Honey Babe

You are not as sweet as honey anymore, I wish you will evaporate just like a water vapor; You only love your bottle of whisky or your liquor, Don’t give me a kiss, you stink! I’ll slam the door. Pack your things and walk out, For the first time I can be hysterical… I’ll scream and shout; You cannot take care of me as I wanted to be stout, Like my idol Betty Boop whose lips are so luscious when pout. I bought this house for you and for me, All day and night I worked hard…now, I’m so skinny; You said, you had contributed a thing here, I don’t agree, Just your one and only nail on the wall, am I happy? Tonight, I will give you your last chance, But keep yourself away from me at ten-meter distance; Drink those perfumes then give me the last dance, Before you’ll sleep naked on the floor and forget me babe, not hon.
May 25, 2014 6.40pm Second Place Contest: Slamming Season Judged: 6/17/14 Sponsor: My fave poet, PD Third Place Contest: Slam The Slam Judged: 8/28/14 Sponsor: My Beloved Poet Skat
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Date: 8/29/2014 9:16:00 PM
Great slam, I loved the flow. grats on your win ;)
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Len Gasun
Date: 9/5/2014 11:44:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend Casarah. Congrats on your many wins as well. Big sweet hugs!
Date: 8/29/2014 6:44:00 AM
Fantastic and a great win, Leo. congrats
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Len Gasun
Date: 9/5/2014 11:44:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear Dr. Ram. Many congratulations on your win as well. Biggest hugs!
Date: 8/28/2014 11:27:00 AM
Way to let them have it Leonora, Congratulation, on your awesome win. Thanks for the support. Loving ~SKAT~
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Len Gasun
Date: 8/30/2014 11:41:00 AM
;))))Thank you so much for the honor, win and especially for appreciating/approval of my slam poem my dearest Skat! In fact, i've already forgotten this contest;))). Thank you, thank you so much and I'm so glad to see you back. Biggest sweet and warm hugs to you! I'll be back soon. Good night and God bless!
Date: 7/19/2014 3:56:00 PM
Hey dear you are really talented in bringing out tots into written words. I really enjoyed and followed this poem to the last. Congrats on your win and know am proud of you dearest friend and love. Big hugs to you and I miss you
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Len Gasun
Date: 8/30/2014 11:32:00 AM
Super belated thank you for this very wonderful comments my dear friend Bob! Huge sweet hugs!
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Len Gasun
Date: 8/30/2014 11:26:00 AM
Super belated thank you for this very wonderful comments my dear friend Bob! Huge sweet hugs!
Date: 7/10/2014 3:44:00 AM
That's told him not to get on the wrong side of you! Congrats on your win!
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/20/2014 10:23:00 AM
Belated many thanks my dear friend John! More blessings! Hugs!
Date: 6/18/2014 10:19:00 PM
Lenora, you sure told him! Terrific slam and win! Hugs
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/1/2014 8:12:00 AM
Thank u so much my dear friend, Cecilia. Hugs back at u.
Date: 6/18/2014 2:46:00 PM
See...your experimental poem served you well!!:) Congratulations on a top placing, Leonora! // paul
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Len Gasun
Date: 7/1/2014 8:14:00 AM
Thank u so much my very dear friend Paul.
Date: 6/17/2014 9:01:00 AM
Congratulations, Lenora , on your placement in the Slam"
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/18/2014 9:26:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend Ray. Big hugs!
Date: 6/17/2014 8:09:00 AM
Congratulations on a well-deserved win, Leonora. Kindest regards!
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/18/2014 9:28:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend Pandita. Kindest regards as well. I'll visit you soon ok. Big hugs!
Date: 6/17/2014 6:02:00 AM
Congrats on a great win, Leonora!! Hugs.. Arlene..
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Date: 6/17/2014 12:52:00 AM
hello My Sweetest SIS... Leo, Loving this one again. I knew it looked familiar..... Congratulations:) Thank you for the Slam Season Support... Stop by and enjoy my newest poem "Dear Mr President" OR my latest blog "Prettiest Poet Girl" if you like. No pressure. :):):) Hugs & Love ~Always & Forever~ your BFF LINDA
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/18/2014 9:34:00 AM
Hi, My Sweetest SIS as well & dearest BFF of mine. Biggest sweetest hugs from me to u. Thank you so much for my great win and and especially for your approval on my slam poem. I didn't expect to get high place here but I did it . Now I know, I can write a slam poem :)))). Thank u ty so much. God bless. tcare always my forever sis-BFF.
Date: 6/8/2014 8:29:00 AM
ha-ha, hope your Honey Babe, understands... Love this...SKAT
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/14/2014 8:13:00 AM
ha ha. he must understand & be more considerate to me my dearest sis & friend Skat; otherwise, my endearment "babe" will be taken away next ;)))) at least he is still my loving babe ;)))) thank u so much for stopping by & enjoying this fictional poem of mine.
Date: 6/4/2014 11:22:00 AM
Hi Leonora! I'm sure this experiment is going to leave some positive results. I would call it a witty slam where you slammed with dignity. gl // paul
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/14/2014 8:17:00 AM
Thank u so much for the very nice compliment my dear friend Paul. Just trying my best to participate in my dearest friend and poet sis' contest. tytysssm... biggest hugs!
Date: 6/2/2014 8:25:00 PM
That is the way lay down the law to this honey babe. This one made me smile for we probably know a person like this. I hope you are feeling better. Thanks for all your comments. love phyl
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/4/2014 8:09:00 AM
I'm happy and grateful for your visit my dear friend Phyllis and your wonderful comments on my poem. I'm doing better now. I was in relentless pressure for the past few days due to additional workload in school. God bless and have a nice day! Big hugs to u!
Date: 5/30/2014 10:25:00 PM
A very powerful and expressive poem, great write!!
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Len Gasun
Date: 6/4/2014 8:10:00 AM
Thank you so much for that wonderful comments my dear friend Arthur. Hugs!
Date: 5/27/2014 11:34:00 PM
This is a story of love and hate, great expression of your feelings through poems. Though sad but there is hope and chance at the end. Great one.
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 9:54:00 AM
Thank u so much for that nice comments my dear friend lena. This is only a fiction and I created it for the contest and for fun at the same time;)))). Hope I did it right. TYSM again. Big hugs!
Date: 5/27/2014 6:50:00 PM
Strongly expressed my friend..You are woman I hear you roar..Nice one Leonora!
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:40:00 AM
No offense for males please.....Big hugs!
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 9:57:00 AM
;)))))Yes, I was roaring in this fiction which I created for the contest and for fun at the same time my dear friend Ken. Thank u so much for the nice comments and your precious time as well. Big hugs!
Date: 5/27/2014 7:00:00 AM
Powerful write. Well penned. Enjoyed. Tfs
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 9:58:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend Ravi. Big hugs!
Date: 5/26/2014 7:32:00 AM
i really digg tjhis, lory.. love the fierce take on the theme, wow.. good to know you are fine in bkk.. ohh, a coup?.. so, we heard.. stay well and let's find that chance to meet up soon.. finally, it rained for an hour here...huggss
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend Nette. Updated news here now is the curfew up to 10pm. Oh, thanks God it rained in Phil. Ok, take care. Big hugs!
Date: 5/25/2014 3:43:00 PM
hahahha :) i love the line with betty boop that made me giggling.. then 2nd: the last line.. :D hahhaha i like that.. :D it's both witty, hilarious poem but well definitive with the thought to slam that man on his head lools.. :D GBU love and hugs.. :D
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:10:00 AM
;)))))) thank you so much my dear friend Olive for the wonderful comments.:)))))I'm glad you caught my naughtiness on some lines.;)))) esp. the one you mentioned. You're smart. This is a fiction I created for the contest and for fun. Hope I did it right. TYSM again. Big hugs!
Date: 5/25/2014 8:49:00 AM
PS..... I like how you handled this. A nice clean slam, soup style. Slamming the affairs of a person, instead of the person indeed... Xool Idea... I love this.... Always & Forever.. Your sis & BFF.... Linda
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:15:00 AM
:))). I'm so happy you read my poem ahead of time my dearest sis. Thank u thank u so much. I just tried to make a slam poem for your contest and I did it for fun. Hope I did it right and I Hope no offense for the males;))))
Date: 5/25/2014 8:46:00 AM
ha ha, I love this experiment poem... My sis... I am here right now, I'll be here for another hour or so.... Miss you my BFF... Thank you for yesterdays comments and visits... Linda
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:26:00 AM
Many many lovely hugs and kisses!
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:21:00 AM
;))))))))Thank you so much my dearest sis. Hope I did my experimental slam poem right. But ops, I miss u so much and I'm so sorry, I've missed your presence here last 25th. Hope I came back here after posting a poem even if I got busy/engrossed with my paintings. Miss u my dearest sis. I'll visit you soon. TYSM again.
Date: 5/25/2014 8:14:00 AM
- Powerful slam !!!! - throw him at the door :)) - Happy time is gone ..... - very well written dear Leonora. - Have a fine Sunday - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:31:00 AM
;)))) ha ha ha. thank u so much my dearest friend Anne Lise, but I already slammed the door. Perhaps on the window. I'must kidding. This is just a fiction for contest. I imagined my boyfriend (who's a soldier & drink sometimes:))) if he will be like this. But he is a very good guy. Hope no offense of males. TYSM & big hugs!
Date: 5/25/2014 7:57:00 AM
Great slam Leonora...Many men get to comfortable in a relationship and take a woman for granted..Good luck in the contest...hugs Tim
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Len Gasun
Date: 5/28/2014 10:37:00 AM
Thank you so much my dear friend Tim for the nice comment and your precious time. You maybe right but maybe only few men:))). Hope no offense for guys 'cuz this is a fiction created for the contest and for fun. Just trying to write a slam poem ;) Big hugs!
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