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See the source imageThis is not my famil but a picture from the internet but it represents the plight of many families years ago.

Come into the empty house
An unlocked door invites
See everything is in order
But there's grayness despite

No meal bubbling on the range
No aroma of baking bread
Absent sounds, blue loneliness
Hollow, empty, silent dread

Then mother lost her good job
She's at home every day
Yellow sunshine greets us
Orange and red fire invites to stay

We would sit down to eat
Big bites of homemade bread
Smooth brown gravy in abundance
Love and warmth lingers instead 

Happy laughter fills our ears
Warm, soft, salty bread our mouth
The sight of both parents there
Fills the spirit's long drouth 

drouth__Old Scottish dialect for drouth

I am not sure if this is what you wanted but I felt it might be ...

Stanza 1---sight, temperature, pain
Stanza 2---sound, scent(smell), and feelings
Stanza 3---feelings, vision, and touch
Stanza 4---taste
Stanza 5---sound, touch, sight, taste

Written: August 10, 2018

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Date: 8/31/2018 9:53:00 AM
yes, the things that really matter - a very thoughtful poem here, my friend
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Date: 8/21/2018 3:29:00 PM
This is lovely Sara. Despite their plight, the children were just happy to have them both home.
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/21/2018 3:33:00 PM
Jean, Yes, the children need things but they also need the presence of the parents in their lives. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Date: 8/16/2018 10:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Well done!
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Date: 8/14/2018 5:36:00 PM
I loved how you formed each stanza as a sense all its own. A lovely poem with a wonderful message, Sara!
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/14/2018 5:46:00 PM
Carrie, It is a delight that you have dropped by my page. I appreciate you reading and taking time to comment. Sara
Date: 8/14/2018 5:47:00 AM
Nicely written, Sara. Best wishes for the contest. T.J
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/14/2018 5:46:00 PM
Teppo, Thanks for all the visits to my page lately. I appreciate the time spent reading my work. You delight me with your presence. Sara
Date: 8/11/2018 6:35:00 PM
Well written verse ,Sara, and best for a win. Hugs Eve
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/14/2018 5:47:00 PM
Eve, Thanks for the best wishes for the win. I just hope that the contest holder will enjoy reading the poem. A win would be nice as well. Sara