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See the source imageThis is not my famil but a picture from the internet but it represents the plight of many families years ago.

Come into the empty house An unlocked door invites See everything is in order But there's grayness despite No meal bubbling on the range No aroma of baking bread Absent sounds, blue loneliness Hollow, empty, silent dread Then mother lost her good job She's at home every day Yellow sunshine greets us Orange and red fire invites to stay We would sit down to eat Big bites of homemade bread Smooth brown gravy in abundance Love and warmth lingers instead Happy laughter fills our ears Warm, soft, salty bread our mouth The sight of both parents there Fills the spirit's long drouth drouth__Old Scottish dialect for drouth I am not sure if this is what you wanted but I felt it might be ... Stanza 1---sight, temperature, pain Stanza 2---sound, scent(smell), and feelings Stanza 3---feelings, vision, and touch Stanza 4---taste Stanza 5---sound, touch, sight, taste Written: August 10, 2018

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Date: 8/31/2018 9:53:00 AM
yes, the things that really matter - a very thoughtful poem here, my friend
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Date: 8/21/2018 3:29:00 PM
This is lovely Sara. Despite their plight, the children were just happy to have them both home.
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/21/2018 3:33:00 PM
Jean, Yes, the children need things but they also need the presence of the parents in their lives. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Date: 8/16/2018 10:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Well done!
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Date: 8/14/2018 5:36:00 PM
I loved how you formed each stanza as a sense all its own. A lovely poem with a wonderful message, Sara!
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/14/2018 5:46:00 PM
Carrie, It is a delight that you have dropped by my page. I appreciate you reading and taking time to comment. Sara
Date: 8/11/2018 6:35:00 PM
Well written verse ,Sara, and best for a win. Hugs Eve
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/14/2018 5:47:00 PM
Eve, Thanks for the best wishes for the win. I just hope that the contest holder will enjoy reading the poem. A win would be nice as well. Sara

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