Afzal Nusker Poet Elegiac Lyric

My Eyes Raining Salty Tears

You took your sunshine smile with you
       when you left me with my eyes raining salty tears.

                 My mind is clouded in shades of gray,
recollecting memories of our past happy days.
              I can't think straight now, my thoughts are stray,
      trespassing the realm of death that took you away.

                      
                My heart is drenched in pools of grief,
releasing the brutal pain that aches my relief.
               I can't hope for good with broken faith and belief
      that's shattered by cruel destiny's wicked mischief.

              You took your sunshine smile with you
       when you left me with my eyes raining salty tears.

             My soul is crumpled by the cold remorse,
receiving the chilly shivers of inconsolable loss.
         I can't warm up my frozen spirit with life's false gloss,
 numbed by my impotence to save you from death's toss.


            My body is doomed by isolation's darkness,
refusing to cope with harsh reality's starkness.
                I can't feel myself without your loving sweetness
     that's poisoned by cunning time's random tartness.

              You took your sunshine smile with you
       when you left me with my eyes raining salty tears.

   The Sun may shine but it will lack your warmth and light.
      My days are so dim and I am devoured by the night. 
Life without you is a challenge and death is no more a plight.
  My loss is too grievously great to give me any more fright. 

       When you left me with my eyes raining salty tears,
               you took your sunshine smile with you.


Date: 01/23/2017

Note: For the contest (Lost Love - Free Verse or Rhyme) by John Hamilton.
          *Placed sixth*
I am not sharing my personal experience, merely the reflection of my observation.

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Maria Williams September 25, 2017 at 6:15 AM I see here that this brilliant poem won a contest, and so deserved. This sad write took the reader on a very painful journey, I myself was near tears reading it till I saw that it was for a contest. Thank God. A brilliant write Afzal....Maria Afzal Nusker September 27, 2017 at 11:06 PM Thank you very much, Maria.

Connie Marcum Wong May 15, 2017 at 6:53 AM Congratulations on your win Afzal. Your empathy is amazing and so heartfelt. 7 ; ) Afzal Nusker May 15, 2017 at 10:31 PM I'm very glad to see you here, Connie. Thanks for the visit and your kind comments.

Pashang Salehi February 4, 2017 at 1:36 PM It seems you're talking about me.... :( Afzal Nusker February 4, 2017 at 10:34 PM Emotions in the content is universal, so many people may relate to it.

Alexis Y. January 27, 2017 at 8:40 AM Hi Afzal, You have penned a well written "Elegaic Lyric." Altough this is fiction you expressed the pain of a brokenheart very well. I felt the hurt and heartache in every line. Well done. A without a doubt seven: -) Alexis Afzal Nusker January 27, 2017 at 11:41 AM Thank you very much, Alexis.