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BANTU an imagist couplet Each line a compete idea,the 2nd however constrasts with a complementary description or explanation or metaphor thereof

A sea mist rolls inshore this morning The optician proposes a cataract op

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Hilo Poet

Date: 11/14/2020 7:50:00 AM

Cleverly written, Brian, after having both my eyes lasered, mist begone but alas, my right eye misses the mist, ergo, upcoming surgeries will I finally fully view the shore again, Aloha!

Brian Strand
Date: 11/14/2020 9:12:00 AM

Hopefully William,stay creative Cheers

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/23/2020 6:47:00 AM

Cute one. I got a chuckle. Those cataracts can make everything cloudy. I have already gone by that way and can see but it is not perfect. Sara

Brian Strand
Date: 9/23/2020 7:06:00 AM

Bless you Sara.