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My Attempt At Haiku

peace before a battle taut for the trample in the breeze petals shudder
*thanks Debbie for the revision*

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Date: 6/24/2016 6:49:00 PM
Nice
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Date: 12/12/2012 12:52:00 PM
I like this one, Yvette. Battle is a good key word. Food for thought. daver
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Date: 12/9/2012 11:19:00 AM
try one more time decide if the subject is the battle or the flower? It's easiest to put the subject in line 1, the action in line 2 and the surprise fragment, the juxtaposed image or sensory input in line 3. Light & love
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Yvette Lisa Ndlovu
Date: 12/9/2012 11:42:00 AM
like this?: "peace before a battle taut for the trample in the breeze petals shudder" oohhh i get it now it makes more sense this way:) thanks Debbie!
Date: 12/8/2012 10:23:00 PM
nice write Y'vette
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Date: 12/8/2012 12:09:00 PM
Yvette Lisa, well done - Wishing you a good and restful weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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