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I am learning to write rhythmic poems. This is my preliminary attempt. Please tell me how to improve it. Thanks.

I hear the ringing music of chimes, The wind whispers turn into beautiful themes, My emotions churn with the musical scales, Joy and pain resonate with the melody’s extents. When the sunrise beams brighten the morning skies, the myriads of colorful rays brighten my eyes, In the lack of wind, the chimes wait with a trust, A wind whisper will arouse musical notes of hope in my heart. In the mid-day, when wind speed rises, The melodious music of chimes enhances, Memories of love songs serenaded to my lover, Rings the chimes in my heart forever. In the night’s darkness, When the chimes are silent and lifeless, Searching for my lover in starry twinkles, My heart plays hide and seek with lonely senses.

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Date: 5/23/2023 12:43:00 PM
I find it to be rhythmical. To improve, I'd just say use a traditional poetry form that has consistent pattern of lines and syllables and that will be even more awesome.
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