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Mountain Rain

Words fell like rain over the mountain As nature prepared for her day of work The first drops fell on the mountain's eyes Like glistening diamonds of treasured surprise The rain fell over the mountain's side And embraced with trickling arms to guide The rain fell into the mountain canyon And formed a river of deep abandon Swirling with airy, white foam peaks Driven by currents of deep-swept mystique That flowed to the meadow and flowered its plain As if my mind were the mountain And your words were the rain.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/7/2009 1:57:00 PM
Really beautiful images, Jane! You certainly have a feel for nature - I bet you'd make great Haiku. Why not try Raul's haiku contest? Thanks for your comments on settled - we're both pensioners now, so I guess the question's settled for good (or ill)!
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Date: 7/7/2009 11:46:00 AM
Wow! Good us of imagery in this thought provoking poem. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent with us. Thank you for your kind comments. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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Date: 7/7/2009 11:11:00 AM
Beautiful oh so beautiful. Outstanding writing my friend. I will read more of your poetry later dear. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/6/2009 10:38:00 PM
i like this
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