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Motionless

where the egrets perch where the petrels nest the kestrels screech wrens peep above the creek which wends then ends where the speckled perch teem and dew bedews the ferns a fp inspiration verse

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Jeff Connelly

Date: 2/11/2019 11:36:00 AM

Hello Brian. I've been enjoying a random selection of your poems. I am in no way a critic, but would like to bounce an idea off that I used to shape my poems. Start your poems in the center, then you can add to the left and the right. I used to put words for together; such as your above lines: which wends then ends where... etc....Aligning and emphasizing "ends" and keeping the "w" words aligned (which you did). Just something I'd throw out there to see if you like.

Brian Strand
Date: 2/11/2019 12:54:00 PM

Thanks Jeff for your input,I use a kindle to post my poetry here,but if I have the appropriate facility on my laptop limited software,I will experiment with your suggestions as they might be very useful to my youtube clips of my open 'organic form' style that I use.Rgds Brian