Moth

Mirage of gauzy wings, Makes a path near gold flames. Mesmerized... it prances Mystically around Moonlit torch: the lure of Magic casts quick danger... Marking butterfly's end. 4/22/2017 Pleiades M Contest for Kim Merryman

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Mark Martin

Date: 5/1/2017 5:52:00 AM

Tells a great story - also a metaphor for dangerous temptation. Congratulations on your win Nette! :-)

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/28/2017 8:51:00 PM

Vivid imagery! I can easily picture the scene in my head. Congrats on your 3rd place win, Nette! Blessings, Kim

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/28/2017 6:35:00 PM

Your words paint the scene with descriptive images that bring the essence and power of your thoughts to the page. Emile.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/25/2017 7:22:00 AM

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/25/2017 7:22:00 AM

I can feel the wings catching on fire from the beginning. When we dance too close to the "flame", falling for the magic and not sensing the danger...you have captured all in your lovely poem! Congrats, Nette 7 and save!

Sushma A. Singh

Date: 4/24/2017 8:41:00 AM

Pretty write! Congrats, Nette!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/23/2017 2:01:00 PM

- Congratulations on your winning poem, Nette :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 4/23/2017 11:49:00 AM

Majestic Pleiades dear, nette! A 7! hugs

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/23/2017 7:39:00 AM

and back with congrats!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/22/2017 8:03:00 AM

This is a beautiful description of the moth, nette. Lovely pleiades.

Miraj Raha

Date: 4/22/2017 2:26:00 AM

Brilliant nette, you have captured the image of moth completely in a neatly structured Pleiades.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/21/2017 4:04:00 PM

wow Nette you have penned a little gem absolutely beautiful imagery this will place very well for you i am sure!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/21/2017 3:08:00 PM

- A beautiful verse that gives a great color play, Nette :) - Luck in the contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Norma Arana

Date: 4/21/2017 2:32:00 PM

Overwhelmed by your delicate but fiery poem!

Leon Datu

Date: 4/21/2017 1:56:00 PM

Brilliant verse--every line leading to a strong , fatal attraction of a "moth to a flame."

Chris Green

Date: 4/21/2017 1:43:00 PM

Beautifully written Nette. I have some of the most gorgeous moths that visit my yard in the evening. Just as beautiful as any butterfly, maybe not as colorful but still amazing wing patterns. Loved your poem my friend.