Nette Onclaud Poet Verse

Moth

Mirage of gauzy wings,
Makes a path near gold flames.

Mesmerized... it prances
Mystically around
Moonlit torch: the lure of
Magic casts quick danger...
Marking butterfly's end.



4/22/2017
Pleiades M Contest for Kim Merryman

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Mark Martin May 1, 2017 at 5:52 AM Tells a great story - also a metaphor for dangerous temptation. Congratulations on your win Nette! :-)

Kim Merryman April 28, 2017 at 8:51 PM Vivid imagery! I can easily picture the scene in my head. Congrats on your 3rd place win, Nette! Blessings, Kim

Emile Pinet April 28, 2017 at 6:35 PM Your words paint the scene with descriptive images that bring the essence and power of your thoughts to the page. Emile.

Kim Rodrigues April 25, 2017 at 7:22 AM 7

Kim Rodrigues April 25, 2017 at 7:22 AM I can feel the wings catching on fire from the beginning. When we dance too close to the "flame", falling for the magic and not sensing the danger...you have captured all in your lovely poem! Congrats, Nette 7 and save!

Sushma A. Singh April 24, 2017 at 8:41 AM Pretty write! Congrats, Nette!

Anne-Lise Andresen April 23, 2017 at 2:01 PM - Congratulations on your winning poem, Nette :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Demetrios Trifiatis April 23, 2017 at 11:49 AM Majestic Pleiades dear, nette! A 7! hugs

Agnes Krampe April 23, 2017 at 7:39 AM and back with congrats!

Agnes Krampe April 22, 2017 at 8:03 AM This is a beautiful description of the moth, nette. Lovely pleiades.

Miraj Raha April 22, 2017 at 2:26 AM Brilliant nette, you have captured the image of moth completely in a neatly structured Pleiades.

Jan Allison April 21, 2017 at 4:04 PM wow Nette you have penned a little gem absolutely beautiful imagery this will place very well for you i am sure!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen April 21, 2017 at 3:08 PM - A beautiful verse that gives a great color play, Nette :) - Luck in the contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Norma Arana April 21, 2017 at 2:32 PM Overwhelmed by your delicate but fiery poem!

Leon Datu April 21, 2017 at 1:56 PM Brilliant verse--every line leading to a strong , fatal attraction of a "moth to a flame."

Chris Green April 21, 2017 at 1:43 PM Beautifully written Nette. I have some of the most gorgeous moths that visit my yard in the evening. Just as beautiful as any butterfly, maybe not as colorful but still amazing wing patterns. Loved your poem my friend.