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Moonlight Dance

Two lovers, taking a midnight stroll Two hearts beating, binding the soul Eyes that never wander emotions running wild He caresses her cheek he loves to make her smile He looks up into the starry sky a little nervous but he has much pride He brings her into his warm embrace she looks at him, such beauty and grace The two begin to sway he must not miss this chance How better to end the day but with a moonlight dance Her head on his shoulder his heart full of love He takes in her pleasant scent knows she was sent down from above The stars were shining ever were they so bright They shared a true love's kiss then told the moon goodnight

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Dean Wood

Date: 5/16/2017 9:42:00 AM

Very well done Laken! I really enjoyed this one. And congratulations on Top New Poet honors. Well deserved.

Jeannette Lake

Date: 5/12/2017 9:29:00 PM

Love!! Love!! your poetry everything flows together perfectly. Keep on writing and keep you mind free! <3

Laken Smith
Date: 5/13/2017 10:47:00 AM

Thank you Jeannette :)

Keith Osborne

Date: 5/12/2017 8:26:00 PM

Laken, this is as beautiful as your name (which I absolutely love). I would be interested how your rhymes would read with an emphasis on the power words and less of the filler words. Some of the redundency. Your readers are well versed enough to understand if you imply some items. I must add you to my favs. I see a real talent within your soul. I hope I make sense.

Laken Smith
Date: 5/13/2017 10:47:00 AM

I have never tried that, I will experiment a little when I get some free time this weekend :) It does make sense and thank you Keith. I really enjoy your comments. :)

Akkina Downing

Date: 5/11/2017 5:28:00 PM

An enchanting piece, Laken. I knew you were gonna come out with some sweet romance soon. I love it :)

Laken Smith
Date: 5/11/2017 7:43:00 PM

Thank you my friend :)

Lenna Walker

Date: 5/11/2017 3:34:00 PM

SW-EEET Laken. The title brought me in and I'm glad I read this, Thanks for sharing :)

Laken Smith
Date: 5/11/2017 3:38:00 PM

Thank you so much and thank you for reading :) I look forward to reading your work as well

Phoenix Rising

Date: 5/10/2017 7:27:00 PM

< 3

Laken Smith
Date: 5/10/2017 7:52:00 PM

Chris Green

Date: 5/10/2017 5:36:00 PM

This was beautiful Laken. From beginning to end, filled with love and saying goodnight to the moon was the perfect touch.

Laken Smith
Date: 5/10/2017 7:22:00 PM

Thank you for the kind words Chris. It means a lot to me that you enjoyed it so :)

Carol B.

Date: 5/10/2017 2:37:00 PM

Very romantic piece :)

Laken Smith
Date: 5/10/2017 2:40:00 PM

Thank you! I am blessed to have a special someone in my life though he showed up a little late ;) He is much of my inspiration. Thanks for reading Carol! I am in the progress of reading your work and I am very impressed.