Moon Spoon

Those times we are both seen in the sky,
my darling sun and I. Yin to my yen. It's then
   I wish she would spoon with this moon.

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Line Gauthier

Date: 11/18/2017 8:06:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jean.

Jean Murray
Date: 11/19/2017 4:18:00 AM

Thank you Line.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 11/18/2017 5:15:00 AM

Best wishes and congrats on your placement, Jean ... keep writing, friend! :-)

Jean Murray
Date: 11/18/2017 8:30:00 AM

Of course Greg. The bug is in my system now. Again thank you for stopping by. I always appreciate any comments.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/17/2017 2:23:00 AM

Hi Jean. Darren is correct. Three lines sometimes say so much more than many lines (I am myself 'guilty of the latter). Willing to learn from you. Kai

Jean Murray
Date: 11/17/2017 5:13:00 AM

Morning Kai. Thank you for the placement. I am no teacher as I have had no training myself. For me words are just something to play around with.

Darren White

Date: 12/31/2016 7:15:00 AM

NO, don't delete please. Some of my own N/A poems I consider my very best. It's just a matter of personal opinion of a judge, which is very acceptable too! And NOT egocentric :)

Jean Murray
Date: 12/31/2016 10:36:00 AM

Good! That's it then. It stays.

Paul Callus

Date: 12/28/2016 5:25:00 PM

This is very creative, Jean....would have been a pleasure to see it on the winners' list!! Never mind...I suppose not all great minds think alike:) ~ Regards // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 12/29/2016 7:47:00 AM

No, not an egocentric...just a lover of words:)

Jean Murray
Date: 12/28/2016 5:39:00 PM

That's so nice of you to say Paul. I often think of deleting poems that failed to make the grade, except I like them too much myself. Does that make me an egocentric I wonder.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/22/2016 1:30:00 PM

Very cleverly written Jean and great pic... I especially love the final line:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray
Date: 12/22/2016 3:07:00 PM

Thank you Jan.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/20/2016 2:21:00 AM

- Great, Jean - Luck in the contest - Merry Christmas to you and your family :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jean Murray
Date: 12/20/2016 4:27:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise. Same to you.

Just James

Date: 12/19/2016 1:51:00 PM

Case if opposites attract..hot and cold? loved your poem.

Jean Murray
Date: 12/19/2016 3:51:00 PM

That's a strange thing isn't it James. My husband was attracted to me because I was everything he wasn't. Problems arose of course, when he then tried to mold me into his likeness.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/19/2016 5:44:00 AM

I love your clever poem Jean. Brilliant! 7 ; )

Jean Murray
Date: 12/19/2016 6:33:00 AM

Thank you Connie. I don't feel too clever these days. Christmas has never been a good time for me. This day next week 'twill all be over, and I'll be back in uniform. Hope you have a merry one.

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 12/17/2016 8:46:00 AM

Soon. or Soon? Jus kidd'n. Nice sun moon PO. Poor eternally frustrated lovers chasing each other around the cosmos. I always feel sorry for them. Huggadoodlenoodles! ~ j

Jean Murray
Date: 12/17/2016 9:24:00 AM

I love your hugs John.

Moon Spoon

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