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Mokista Springs, Aitoloakarnania

Gurgling serenade
tirelessly sung by the water
to the plane trees.
                
Gurgling serenade.
My soul has become a note
in  that Divine song.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/8/2014 7:51:00 PM

Do you mean "plain" trees in this one. I am not sure what plane trees might be, but I am guessing you mean simple trees, right? I really like how you continued your thought into the second one, becoming one with the water's song. I see this won a contest. A very belated congrats to you.

Debra Squyres

Date: 3/12/2013 1:43:00 PM

Enjoyed both of these verses...I can hear the gurgling of a stream and can easily become a part of it.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/29/2012 9:04:00 AM

Yes of course you amy post this in your blog ;) [soft thick moss/covers the fallen trunk --drizzle falls] above I will try to assist you..in making the verses more haiku-like..[do not use personification ;)]think subject/action - surprise, as you begin to learn the form[a gurgling brook/flows through the green woodlands -- waterbugs leap] speaking of soul is best left for another form, soul is subjective and not objective BUT let's try and get the geist of your content into a haiku like form

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 12/29/2012 9:08:00 AM

[my heart beats/to the water's rhythm- bird song] this would show man joined with nature

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/29/2012 3:44:00 AM

Beautiful writing! Fresh as the waters of the Spring. Thank you Mr. Comporozos for your comment on my poem 'TIME'. Yes, by all means you may present my poem on your blog, provided you make the autor of the poem known to your readers with (C). Are you from Aitolokarnania? I AM! Hope to hear from you again.