Jun-Jun Villanueva Poet Fibonacci

' Missing the Old Days '

Life,
Breath -
Taken
One leg gone
Perished in deathbed
Diabetes  murdered Grandpa
Benumbed by ill - gash's agony perforating - dulled
Gold medal won after the day of his death reminds me of his only heart memoirs...

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Nick Bagnall September 7, 2011 at 8:34 AM Sad story, gold lining tinged with a cloud, well expressed in an interesting form.

Cory Long August 5, 2011 at 7:15 AM congrats on your win in the contest with this exceptional write cory

Jack Horne August 2, 2011 at 10:57 AM Many congratulations, Jun-jun : )

Nette Onclaud August 2, 2011 at 1:20 AM yeahey, jun..heaps of congrats on your amazing award!! :) huggs!

S.Jagathsimhan Nair August 2, 2011 at 1:00 AM Thanks, jun-jun, for your kind words.Congrats..SJ

Dr.Ram Mehta August 1, 2011 at 9:02 PM My congratulations on the second place win in the contest of carol,jun-jun

Dr.Ram Mehta August 1, 2011 at 9:01 PM My congratulations on the second place win in the contest of carol,jun-jun

Nancy Jones August 1, 2011 at 8:46 PM Powerful, jun-jun.! Much said in few words!

Don Johnson August 1, 2011 at 6:38 PM Sad things do happen, sickness kills, great poem mate of Grandpa still, good on ya, Don

Caryl Ramsdale August 1, 2011 at 6:29 PM A winning congratulations! Caryl

Joseph Osita August 1, 2011 at 5:44 PM Very nice! Congrats on your 2nd place win in the contest.

Carol Sunshine Brown August 1, 2011 at 3:12 PM Congratulations on your placement in my latest contest Jun-Jun. It was very hard choosing the placements as I loved them all. Have a wonderful week. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 1, 2011 at 3:02 PM congrats jun-jun on your spectacular second place win with this wonderful write luv.. a true treasure..

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 30, 2011 at 12:17 PM I have never tried this form I think-- very interesting take on it-- and I have to agree, diabetes sure is a cruel disease-- I am sorry you lost your lolo to it-- your last line gives this such a bittersweet ending...

Dalila Agtani July 30, 2011 at 1:32 AM Jun-Jun Now I need to read Fibonacci form! How have you been? The formatted form looks so nice and creative. Of course the content has deep meaning! Thank you for sharing. My warmest regards to you! Dalila

Tim B July 29, 2011 at 10:24 PM Touching and emotional, a powerful write. Thanks for sharing.