Missing

lost in summer breeze
fall sunshine on leafless tree -
diamond on river

treehaiku

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Paul Callus

April 17, 2014 at 9:36 AM

a haiku where imagery takes centre stage; well done....full marks !! // paul

Donna Jones

April 6, 2014 at 8:16 AM

Very visual...and lovely...congratulations

David Mohn

April 6, 2014 at 1:14 PM

Thanks so much Donna :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

April 6, 2014 at 6:24 AM

Congratulations on a fine win. I enjoyed the poem, david

David Mohn

April 6, 2014 at 1:13 PM

Thank you Dr. Ram

Kim Merryman

April 5, 2014 at 9:06 PM

Nice haiku, David! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

David Mohn

April 6, 2014 at 1:06 AM

Thanks Kim,,,your hiaku 39 is wonderfull - love srabble also :)

David Mohn

April 5, 2014 at 9:47 AM

Thank you so much SKAT...can't wait for that summer breeze myself :)

Skat A

April 4, 2014 at 9:24 PM

Well Done David, the only thing missing from this haiku, is me enjoying the breeze and imagery. A perfect 10 haiku. congrats. SKAT

David Mohn

April 5, 2014 at 9:47 AM

Thank you so much SKAT...can't wait for that summer breeze myself :)

Poet Destroyer A

April 4, 2014 at 5:45 PM

DAVID, Congratulations, awesome VERSE! xox ~LINDA

Poet Destroyer A

April 4, 2014 at 6:18 PM

thank you I'd like one from you...xoxooxoxoxo

David Mohn

April 4, 2014 at 6:13 PM

Thanks Linda...love comments from you!

Aiyah Torres

April 4, 2014 at 12:51 PM

nice poem ,David!!! ..well done for Andrea's contest... Congratulations!!!! :o))

David Mohn

April 4, 2014 at 6:12 PM

Thank you so much AiyaH :)

Andrea Dietrich

April 4, 2014 at 12:49 AM

awesome imagery. My only suggestion to you is not to use capitalization in haiku. Then this one would have scored higher. Congrats in my contest. I really liked this one.

David Mohn

April 4, 2014 at 12:26 PM

Thanks Andrea...I did not know that about Haiku. I appreciate your comments as well