Message In a Bottle - Here - John

Our excursion brushed past bashing tides.
An uncharted desert shelter
is where the vessel resides.
Stripped of rhyme and reason;
I behold demons
strumming spiked lyres
yielding me
lonely 
here.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Wright Avatar
August 19, 2012 at 8:14 PM
What a message John! I truly love your nonet! I am also grateful for the honorable mention in your contest. It made me smile :-)
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July 10, 2012 at 5:00 PM
ooooo, I love this John...very nice Nonet! wonderful thoughts--wonderfully deep...:) love ya, deb
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April 10, 2011 at 9:04 AM
Sent you a Soup mail, John. I hadn't posted the poem. After reading your blog, I thought you were looking for poems about main courses, not candy. I just posted it now, so your contest has closed. Just wanted to be helpful, not expecting to win. Have fun with the contest judging. I'm not big on writing about food. Been having health problems and am on a strict diet now. Love, Carolyn
Brown Avatar
March 8, 2011 at 10:25 AM
Congratulations on a well deserved win John. Love, Carol
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March 8, 2011 at 8:47 AM
Congrats John on your big win in the contest of Linda!Enjoyed your poem---kashinath
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March 7, 2011 at 7:13 PM
Hey John Congratulations on your win in Linda's contest. Very well written as all your poems are. You have the magic touch. Best wishes, KC
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March 7, 2011 at 10:41 AM
Hello John, Congratulations on your first place in the contest. Well done, I like this one very much As Always, Shar
K. Avatar
March 7, 2011 at 7:45 AM
What a very different take on the challenge, John, with very engaging lines too :) Super congrats on the awesome 2nd place win and Thank you as well for my HM in your contest :) I am really happy to be in your list-- thanks :D
Neels Avatar
March 7, 2011 at 3:26 AM
Hey there John, congratulations to you on your win in the contest and with your poems being selected for the soup contest, love Wilma
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March 6, 2011 at 9:26 PM
Congratulations on your win, John. Best wishes, Carolyn
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March 6, 2011 at 6:41 PM
what a fantastical little tale this challenge inspired from you, john. a big congratulations on your awesome win, and also on getting three poems into the soup contest! Luv, Andrea
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March 6, 2011 at 6:16 PM
congratulations on your second place win with this beautiful worded nonet...wonderfully penned ,,and I want to thank you for all your visits and for the comments that you have left behind,,Blessings..Cecil
Freeman Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 5:25 PM
So great to see you at the top in this one John. Congratulations on your worthy second place honored poem. Agape, Moses
Onclaud Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 3:38 PM
rise and shine, john! congrats with amiles to yuo.. :) huggs, nette
Haick Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 3:15 PM
Congratulations on your very fine and deserving win in Linda's Contest, John. Annalise
Caliri Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 2:56 PM
Nice Nonet! I appreciate your appreciation for my poem, and it's resultant high placing in your contest...I got that thing in in the nick of time apprarently! Thanks again...(also check soupmail)
Mehta Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 2:10 PM
Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Linda, John
Sweetheart Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 12:07 PM
Congrats John on your success in my contest .. excellent message.. thankxx for your support..
Whitlock-Ishway Avatar
March 6, 2011 at 6:34 AM
Great write John with wonderful imagery. Love it... Lay
Devonshire Avatar
March 5, 2011 at 4:42 PM
Soup mail returned, John.
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March 4, 2011 at 1:15 PM
superb 'message in a bottle'...
Mehta Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 10:41 AM
Nice message, good luck in the contest, John
Hales Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 10:36 AM
Intresting writing ..it hept me wanting more Sarah x
Devonshire Avatar
March 4, 2011 at 9:49 AM
Well done, John! I enjoyed the perspective you took. On an uncharted desert island, I imagine demons would haunt us. The first line is awesome - creative description and a touch of alliteration. Wishing you success in the contest. I have been working on something that's a bit "out there" for your contest. Keep rewriting and revising. Hope it's okay to write about a real person. Love, Carolyn
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March 4, 2011 at 8:02 AM
i like the fast then slow effect of this nonet, john.. smashing! best winning winshes to you! :) hugggs, nette
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