Mesmerized By Silence

smoke curls, dividing us into lonely sentries by the fire, as we watch the embers die, in silence black words drifting upwards from the ashes, cast shadows on the moon stinging the eyes of the night with despair
__________________________________________________ For the contest sponsered by Nette: "Views from a Vignette" Carrie Richards 10/30/12 note: "fire" used as two syllables)
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Dietrich Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 5:00 PM
wow, so far, the top three are marvelous!! She judged well. Congratulations.
A   Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 10:54 AM
Carrie, CONGRATULATIONS, in Nette's "VIEWS FROM A VIGNETTE" contest.. Keep up the good work... always~ PD
Sweetheart Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 7:52 PM
CONGRATS CARRIE ON A FABULOUS WIN FOR A MOST CREATIVE WRITE LUV .. TRULY ENJOYED YOUR VISION ..
Harrington Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 12:29 PM
Truely a great write! Love where you took this theme! :) Tanya
Kendrick Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 11:55 AM
Very emotively expressed winnning work..Congrats on your win...Sara
Poet Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 10:02 AM
Congrats Carrie on your win!Honoured to share 2nd spot with you.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 8:00 AM
Another superb win, congratulations Carrie xx
Guzzi Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 7:59 AM
I really felt the second verse carry black words flying up across a black sky to sully the moon!tremendous! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Brown Avatar
November 9, 2012 at 7:15 AM
Congratulations on your win in the Vignette contest Carrie. Love, Carol
Chircop Avatar
November 6, 2012 at 12:46 AM
so wonderdful to be here reading your outstanding poetry dear
K. Avatar
November 1, 2012 at 11:43 AM
What you have written here is so vivid for me, and I can't help but imagine that I, too would be mesmerized if I witness this--I find this to be wonderfully written, as you do best... I like how this can be a literal scene and a metaphorical one....funny (in a nice way) how I was just mentioned "comfortable silence" to you today, and then I click on your name and see a poem by you on silence.... Happy Halloween dear Carrie!
Poet Avatar
November 1, 2012 at 8:15 AM
Excellent take on the contest theme Carrie!Always enjoy your poetry.
A   Avatar
October 31, 2012 at 3:20 PM
Carrie, stopping by to wish you a Happy Halloween ;-).~hugs xox hugs~ Please have a happy, fun and safe Halloween. Trick or treat~ Love:-) PD
Brown Avatar
October 31, 2012 at 11:56 AM
I have enjoyed reading your poetry today Carrie. Hope to read more of it soon. Love, Carol
Mannan Avatar
October 30, 2012 at 10:44 PM
Beautiful Carrie. Nette is going to love this. All the best for the contest.
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