Mental Massacre

My mind opened releasing the remnants of Pandora’s Box
Revealing the wraths of a complete paradox
Eradicating the thought process like a mental massacre
Destroying your clarity until your notions are obscure
Slaughtering your expressions, total annihilation
Bludgeoning your lines, poetic eradication 
Devouring your preconception, with utter devastation
Eliminating your disposition, enlightened extermination 
Butchering your reason with a brutal bloodbath
Lyrics linger in limbo lost in the aftermath
Slaying your insight with catastrophic rhymes
Conscious collapsin' corpses fallin' with the times
A war of words, our philosophies collide
Verses fall victim to a vicious verbal genocide

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 12/17/2011 12:41:00 AM
Your poetic style is quite astounding! You words everything perfectly and in a way that makes the mind fly in a thousand directions - it's a great gift of writing to have and I love it! Always, Laura
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Date: 10/27/2011 11:18:00 AM
A massacre indeed. Great work Chiquita and very resourceful. What an exceptional imagination it must take to write such a poem filled with vivid imagery. Thank you kindly for your comment on my peom.
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Date: 9/22/2011 4:50:00 PM
Holy Smokes...what emotion you have in these 14short lines....I think I could have screamed this in court about 8 years ago. Would have felt great! Best to this official poetry slam! Gwendolen
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Date: 9/22/2011 12:08:00 AM
It sure sets the tone for massacre, of a verbal type! it reminds me what slam poetry must be like!
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Date: 9/21/2011 7:31:00 PM
GIRLFRIEND....NOW you see it! YESSSS Maam! It is ON NOW! ....7rate and to my FAVES, no DOUBT....I'm glad we are on the same LazorWave! You are the "ISH"
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Date: 9/21/2011 1:35:00 AM
is this a rewrite of another one of your pieces, or is it similar to one you got in your catalog? --Maybe I'm trippin'! Either way, I like the flow. I got advice on suum...if you want it.
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Date: 9/21/2011 1:51:00 AM
you know i want the advice....lol...and its not a rewrite its the one from the soup mail the other day
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Date: 9/21/2011 1:50:00 AM
you know i want the advice...lol.. and its not a rewrite.. its the same one from the soup mail from the other day
Date: 9/21/2011 1:00:00 AM
i love the gore girl. very colorful. keep it up ma.
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Date: 9/21/2011 12:22:00 AM
Great word play. Hope it's not writ for me.
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Date: 9/20/2011 10:43:00 PM
wow! here it comes. you knocked my socks off!!! you used what you had and you used it wisely. i have to put this in my faves it would be incompleat with out it. i beginning to notice your work and your method. i like your brain it's like mine. good work. john
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Date: 9/20/2011 10:23:00 PM
Classic writing...may god keep blessing you
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Date: 9/20/2011 9:06:00 PM
Full of verve here dear poet ! *smiles* A dry martini and another write ! Have a great week Chiquita...much love, james
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Date: 9/20/2011 9:06:00 PM
A veritable verbal war in literature, Chiqita! Excellent job of it. Very impressive. I enjoy the alliterations in this battle of the mind also
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Date: 9/20/2011 6:56:00 PM
maelstorm flows with words of those, who parting have a shot, dont mess with me or you will see, a slap n tickle not ...hehe great emotive poetry
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Date: 9/20/2011 5:57:00 PM
wowser a mouthful of verve! remenids me of me on a rant ! loved it..light & love
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Date: 9/20/2011 5:30:00 PM
I like the rhymes
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Date: 9/20/2011 5:30:00 PM
I love the opening line...it (you) blows my mind! The whole thing is so damn depressing but lifts me up and keeps me guessing. I really just hope you're ok Chiqita because this sounds like your dealing with some serious pain issues. For what's it worth - another great poem and I'm still on your side. Peace, Luv, Smiles, Terry
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