Chiquitachiamaka Baity Poet Rhyme

Mental Massacre

My mind opened releasing the remnants of Pandora’s Box
Revealing the wraths of a complete paradox
Eradicating the thought process like a mental massacre
Destroying your clarity until your notions are obscure
Slaughtering your expressions, total annihilation
Bludgeoning your lines, poetic eradication 
Devouring your preconception, with utter devastation
Eliminating your disposition, enlightened extermination 
Butchering your reason with a brutal bloodbath
Lyrics linger in limbo lost in the aftermath
Slaying your insight with catastrophic rhymes
Conscious collapsin' corpses fallin' with the times
A war of words, our philosophies collide
Verses fall victim to a vicious verbal genocide

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Laura Breidenthal December 17, 2011 at 12:41 AM Your poetic style is quite astounding! You words everything perfectly and in a way that makes the mind fly in a thousand directions - it's a great gift of writing to have and I love it! Always, Laura

Margaret Okubo October 27, 2011 at 11:18 AM A massacre indeed. Great work Chiquita and very resourceful. What an exceptional imagination it must take to write such a poem filled with vivid imagery. Thank you kindly for your comment on my peom.

Gwendolen Song September 22, 2011 at 4:50 PM Holy Smokes...what emotion you have in these 14short lines....I think I could have screamed this in court about 8 years ago. Would have felt great! Best to this official poetry slam! Gwendolen

Andrea Dietrich September 22, 2011 at 12:08 AM It sure sets the tone for massacre, of a verbal type! it reminds me what slam poetry must be like!

Jslambert Mister Roboto September 21, 2011 at 7:31 PM GIRLFRIEND....NOW you see it! YESSSS Maam! It is ON NOW! ....7rate and to my FAVES, no DOUBT....I'm glad we are on the same LazorWave! You are the "ISH"

Jslambert Mister Roboto September 21, 2011 at 1:35 AM is this a rewrite of another one of your pieces, or is it similar to one you got in your catalog? --Maybe I'm trippin'! Either way, I like the flow. I got advice on suum...if you want it. Chiquitachiamaka Baity September 21, 2011 at 1:51 AM you know i want the advice....lol...and its not a rewrite its the one from the soup mail the other day Chiquitachiamaka Baity September 21, 2011 at 1:50 AM you know i want the advice...lol.. and its not a rewrite.. its the same one from the soup mail from the other day

Roman Chebukin September 21, 2011 at 1:00 AM i love the gore girl. very colorful. keep it up ma.

John Smith September 21, 2011 at 12:22 AM Great word play. Hope it's not writ for me.

John Loving Iii September 20, 2011 at 10:43 PM wow! here it comes. you knocked my socks off!!! you used what you had and you used it wisely. i have to put this in my faves it would be incompleat with out it. i beginning to notice your work and your method. i like your brain it's like mine. good work. john

Anthony Barrow September 20, 2011 at 10:23 PM Classic writing...may god keep blessing you

Robert A. Dufresne September 20, 2011 at 9:06 PM A veritable verbal war in literature, Chiqita! Excellent job of it. Very impressive. I enjoy the alliterations in this battle of the mind also

James Peranteau September 20, 2011 at 9:06 PM Full of verve here dear poet ! *smiles* A dry martini and another write ! Have a great week Chiquita...much love, james

Don Johnson September 20, 2011 at 6:56 PM maelstorm flows with words of those, who parting have a shot, dont mess with me or you will see, a slap n tickle not ...hehe great emotive poetry

Debbie Guzzi September 20, 2011 at 5:57 PM wowser a mouthful of verve! remenids me of me on a rant ! loved it..light & love

Brandon Harrison September 20, 2011 at 5:30 PM I like the rhymes

Terrell Martin September 20, 2011 at 5:30 PM I love the opening line...it (you) blows my mind! The whole thing is so damn depressing but lifts me up and keeps me guessing. I really just hope you're ok Chiqita because this sounds like your dealing with some serious pain issues. For what's it worth - another great poem and I'm still on your side. Peace, Luv, Smiles, Terry