Memories

Jack Horne 

Her dark eyes
So intense
When we met

Those dark eyes
Passionate
Spoke of love

Angry eyes
Flashing fire
As she left

Senryu for Eyes First Meet

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Carolyn Devonshire

May 13, 2011 at 2:34 PM

Jack, please let me know if I have missed any of your poems. I so enjoy reading them. This was just as intense on the second reading. Love, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

March 31, 2011 at 10:32 AM

Reads like a winner for sure...I got a chuckle..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by and the kind review of my work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

March 28, 2011 at 5:46 AM

Good Luck Jack on your entry collaboration with Gert .. a fabulous piece of poetry my friend.. u also can post it and enter it for credit according to Lay's rules now.. good luck to u both for a super write ...luv..

Carolyn Devonshire

March 26, 2011 at 2:19 PM

Looking for that limerick, Jack. Let me know when you post it! Love, Carolyn

Carolyn Devonshire

March 26, 2011 at 12:00 PM

Oooh, her eyes went from intense and passionate to angry so quickly, Jack! Love can be fickle sometimes, eh? Great entry for Michael's contest. As for your question, both you and Gert need to post the entire poem and enter it separately. Otherwise, the sponsor will be confused. Please let Gert know. Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

March 26, 2011 at 6:38 AM

GREAT Jack..looks very good luv.. again good luck ... happy weekend too...

Stephen Parker

March 25, 2011 at 6:08 PM

Her piercing eyes had you at first laser beam. You were metaphorically and then physically smitten. Nice job of sequencing the relationship.

Andrea Dietrich

March 25, 2011 at 2:32 PM

Oh, wow, I love how you went to beginning of relationship, middle and then end! good play!!

Dr.Ram Mehta

March 25, 2011 at 2:08 PM

Nice surpirsing twist at the end, jack

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

March 25, 2011 at 1:40 PM

Oh Jack such emotion in your Senryu.. is it for Michael's contest luv? need your name at top and contest name and poetry form on bottom if so luv.. good luck and happy weekend ...

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