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Mellow Flash Hope

___________________________________ swoon beam on the edge optimism tempered twinkle~ frontward through the dawn time passes away echoing in hollow past~ future whispering nothing left inward those loathsome optimists smirk~ blind to my hollow

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Hilo Poet

Date: 12/7/2023 5:03:00 PM

Deep, Lasaad. Eloquently defining, an undeniable part of assiduousness that's of your hollow, my friend. Cheers, for I'm in your charge. Aloha, William

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/5/2023 2:03:00 PM

Creative lines penned in this one. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing it and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/5/2023 9:05:00 AM

dearest Sotto--your poem flows with such wisdom and philosophical depth and articulated in what I call the famous Sotto style--vivid images and powerful lines delivered magnificently. This line (time passes away echoing in hollow past~ future whispering) reminds me of my younger brother who struggled. His past was truly hollow and he had not a hint of optimism left in his soul. He frequently said that optimists were blind to his hollowness. Your poem resonated with me for sure. A fave! Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/5/2023 6:12:00 AM

time passes away echoing in hollow past~ future whispering--- a meaningful depiction resonates in your thoughts. A potent commentary on life.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/5/2023 3:54:00 AM

Wow, these haiku poems are so beautifully kept together, enriched with philosophical depth, words of wisdom & a very profound perspective! I'm in awe of your abilities to describe immense vividness within such few words.. Yes, the shades of a melancholic past are truly hollow and we should listen to the whispers of the future that echo the secrets of how can we change the stories by living in present.. Optimism and hope are both necessary for life, and with reality combined, it becomes more wise

Silent One

Date: 12/5/2023 3:28:00 AM

You are a very intelligent person and that always shows through the wisdom of your words... These are three very good haiku in their own uniqueness.. You paint a realist picture and its like an intro, main and then a conclusion...

Ink Empress

Date: 12/5/2023 3:09:00 AM

These are words of a philosopher, you really have a philosophical way of thinking. I felt like i was reading about optimists, who are unrealistic? Some of them refuse to accept whats unsaid and u seen and seem so blindly trusting, I believe i am a cynical realist. Not very optimistic, these haiku have so much depth and I believe every reader would ponder reading this. Such profound truth: and thoughts well articulated in a seamless manner: always a pleasure reading your work

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/5/2023 2:49:00 AM

- Close the door of the past ... throw away the key ... let the new day sparkle, my friend Las - hugs

Paige Hind

Date: 12/4/2023 8:18:00 PM

You're seeing differently...? I enjoyed this poem. :)