Mask Unmasked

She opened the door and tiptoed in,
golden luscious hair, tossed to spin,
her legs were naked,longer on heels,
Here she was with my evening meals!
Blue eyes smiling behind black lashes,
Mask on face and shoe without laces!
She adjusted bed to serve me food,
For man of romance, so far so good!
She poured me water, from a bottle,
My heart was going at full throttle!
Her perfume put my mind in a trance
Every bit of me was up for romance!
Some evening she brought me a treat!
My high fever was all from love heat!
one day she slowly took off her mask,
poured me coffee from thermos flask,
That was the day I saw her full face,
her smile was running out of space.
From that day on, mask she never wore,
With every smile I was in love even more!
fever came down, the bill was high,
I left the hospital with a deep sigh!
Now I wander in thunder and in rain
So I can get sick and go back again!


Written 21/07/2020
Premier competition winner
10 to 20 lines on Mask
Sponsor Mohan Chutani
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020


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Date: 7/28/2020 1:03:00 PM
What a lovely soothing tale of endeared emotions Krish! That twist in the end made me smile. Layered emotions add to the beauty of your muse. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/28/2020 1:14:00 PM
Thanks Aditi! Pleased to be amongst the winners. I aimed to write slightly different from the usual theme. Glad you like it. Warm regards
Date: 7/27/2020 1:05:00 PM
What a charming, delightful poem--with a surprise ending. CONGRATS on your win, Krish. Janice
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/27/2020 1:21:00 PM
Janice Thank you very much, Janice! Honoured! Delighted you like it.:)
Date: 7/27/2020 4:39:00 AM
Krish, enjoyed the unmasking of the romantic mask that your muse conveyed. Congratulations on your fine placement in my contest. Mohan
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/27/2020 10:21:00 AM
Thank you Mohan for the contest and my placement. I wanted to write something different from the usual mask concepts. Very happy you thought of it well. Best Wishes :)
Date: 7/27/2020 2:01:00 AM
Ha ha ha...your poems make me smile always dear Krish sir.Enjoyed it tremendously. Was eager as I read and felt wonder in the end:-) Congratulations on your wonderful win.:-)Keep inspiring us with ur amazing Muse.Warmest regards to you:-)
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Date: 7/27/2020 10:39:00 AM
Thank you Deepa! So pleased with your lovely compliment and your feedback. Glad you liked it! Best wishes :)
Date: 7/25/2020 10:35:00 PM
Your title had me expecting something unusual, and I got it in the twist. Nicely constructed piece without a wasted word., nice read.
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/26/2020 10:33:00 PM
Thanks Reggae, for your fabulous comments. Pleased you like it.
Date: 7/25/2020 7:40:00 AM
Love brings sight of truth and life Its beauty seeds in happiness and bliss Oft washing away world's tragic strife And in its place, sends that first loving kiss.. I truly enjoyed your very inspirational new creation my friend. God bless.
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/25/2020 10:22:00 AM
Thanks Robert! love at first sight is a reality!! Warmest regards
Date: 7/23/2020 4:39:00 AM
Good one. Enjoyed reading it.
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/23/2020 7:57:00 AM
Thanks Rama!! Pleased you like it.
Date: 7/22/2020 2:07:00 PM
Love the twist at the end Krish, be careful what you wish for. Lol. Good luck in the contest Tom
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Date: 7/23/2020 3:03:00 AM
Thanks Tom! Some fun during these tough times! Much appreciated, my friend!
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