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gone and weeping
heart pierced with open sorrow
finding its mark

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 6/4/2010 9:37:00 AM
Intense emotions written in this Haiku...Great job...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 6/3/2010 2:21:00 PM
Another good one! Thanks for stopping by to read my Memories of Love. Andrea
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Date: 6/3/2010 11:09:00 AM
thanks....but....its a haiku to me.....
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Date: 6/3/2010 10:58:00 AM
A sad but beautiful haiku, Zera! Well done. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/3/2010 10:43:00 AM
I see Deborah has instructed you on your Haiku, Zera. An excellent thought presented. I read you comment on her poem, about the rose. But Hey, a lot of the best of humanity comes when the back is pressed against a wall. A faith not tried, is a faith not prefected. Agape, Moses
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Date: 6/3/2010 9:44:00 AM
Thanks Zera...I new it was a quote but I didn't find who said it...good ole Elanore Roosevelt! you have 2 actions in your verse...haiku attempts to freeze 1 moment in time ..this is more like a senyru because it's about humanity...heart is the topic..line 1 what happens to the topic goes in lines 2&3..with line 3 being a cutting phrase or juxtaposition...your line 3 is fine!
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