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mango

green skin holds a dream sweet flesh hides a large, flat seed - golden juice now drips

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CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/26/2025 4:00:00 PM

Now I'm completely unsure about young vs. old, somethings got me confused that I can't name; maybe your ability to pen matured depth. This is a good one, only lacks a 'kicker' 3rd line and many here forget about that. The haiku is supposed to take a sudden diverse turn on 3rd line, i.e., 'it fell on the floor' (5 syll top of me head)...CayCay

Ghairo Daniels

Date: 5/25/2025 11:12:00 PM

Hey, Bernard ! we’ve chosen the same fruit. I love your one. drip is also common. > great minds think alike. Lol. Something like that. Blessings.

Jacqueline R. Mendoza

Date: 5/25/2025 8:16:00 PM

Yeah Mango, it's color can be green or yellow, I think it has hair think about it right? The flavors can be sweet n sour and sometimes bitter if u mistakenly bit its flat seed. I'm just getting ideas on what kinds of poems I should write kase I'm into Eternal God so I'm just looking at your collections of titles. Can I copy some? lol