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"Don't tell me the sky is the limit when there are footprints on the Moon." — Paul Brandt

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Jinjagoliath poem:
10th December 2023
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Man on the Moon

Can we put a man on the moon?
Just asking, hope not too soon..

We've built him a rocket
In the shape of a bed
With nice fluffy pillows
For his white fluffy head

Powered by electrickery
With buttons and dials
It's sure to be comfy
For those final few miles

Can we put a man on the moon?
Not so gender exclusive
It's just time is short
And our volunteer effusive

We have oxygen prepped
With fire safety assessment
All the food is prepared
Every cover and vestment

Has been guilded with love
And we've washed up the dishes
Now a hareem of beauty
To attend to his wishes

It's an easier challenge
Than a rocket and booster
If the attendees can wake up
Without the aid of a rooster

A launch date is looming
So the countdown is clicking
It's weather dependent
And that red button keeps sticking

Not the end of his journey
But the start of another
This spaceman is ready..
Leaving me and my brother

Can we put a man on the moon?
It's an easier ask
But saying goodbye..
That's the heart-wrenching task
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Ashley Avatar
January 13, 2024 at 12:00 PM
Dear Christopher, your amazing poem is beautifully composed and recited. A very emotive, thought-provoking and haunting piece. I adore your use of the word “electrickery”. A stroke of poetic genius my friend. A creative and gifted wordsmith and word-player you are, dear poet. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Grieves Avatar
January 13, 2024 at 1:17 PM
Why thank you very much Susan! A little secret - this poem is really about my Dad and we used to call him Catweazle because of his beard.. he looked like the character in the TV show and "electrickery" was a reference often used - I cannot really take credit. Bless you for an amazing comment, I am so very flattered x
Empress Avatar
December 10, 2023 at 4:34 AM
Gosh what a way to express how difficult saying goodbyes is, i agree with you. And strange i just posted a moon poem too hah. I love the flow of this. And the wordplay is very creative and artistic. I especially love “ Not the end of his journey But the start of another This spaceman is ready.. Leaving me and my brother“ this stanza made me tear up. Im so sorry. Sigh. Sending you strength always. Pleasure reading your work
Grieves Avatar
December 10, 2023 at 6:38 AM
We are strong Ink and the big red button not quite pushed yet.. but I am grateful for your lovely words of support and care. As always x
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