Sam Kauffman Poet Verse

Lune - Note

Lune - Note

one note missing 
 harmony refrains to be resolved 
  staggers in echoes

reverberating regret resounds
 in cacophony’s heavy metal discord 
  life’s melody limping

Contest: Flow with the Collum Lune
Nette Onclaud
Visual #1
5-11-20

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Beata Agustin May 15, 2020 at 6:21 AM Wow! Congrats! God bless you. Thanks so much for your comments. I appreciate them, as I do admire your poetic style.

L. J. Carber May 14, 2020 at 10:02 AM Congrats Sam-- has that haiku feel I love! Sam Kauffman May 14, 2020 at 2:22 PM This was fun, LJ. Thank you for the "congrats!" Love the adaptation of the haiku form - message in a few words with a punchline! Nice change of pace. Be blessed my friend.

Richard Lamoureux May 14, 2020 at 7:13 AM I like how you approached this piece. You struck the perfect tone. Sam Kauffman May 14, 2020 at 11:50 PM Thank you so much Richard. It just seemed to me that we need all the notes to create harmony both in music and in life. Here's to harmony!

John Watt May 13, 2020 at 1:46 PM Ooh, I really liked "reverberating regret resounds", and all your great musical references: harmony, melody, echoes, cacophony. What else would I expect from a pianist/poet? Beautifully done, Sam - a winner for me ~ John Sam Kauffman May 14, 2020 at 2:01 PM The temptation was just too great for a musician - had to swing at that pitch! Thank you dear friend. Was fun to run the base paths with this one! Always fun to work with a new poetic form. Blessed dear friend!

Aditi Mishra May 13, 2020 at 12:16 PM This is chaotic yet beautiful. Congratulations! :) Sam Kauffman May 14, 2020 at 1:58 PM Hi Aditi, if I haven't welcomed you to the soup before - welcome! Thank you for your visit and your delightful feedback. Sometimes when the music of life is missing a note, there is a frantic quality - it does get chaotic. Thank you for your congratulations!

Silent One May 12, 2020 at 11:28 AM A melancholic take on the contest... Sam Kauffman May 13, 2020 at 4:17 PM A missing note - a lost chord. The visual reminded me that all the keys and notes are necessary to give music life! Thank you so much for your visit.

Jenish Somadas May 12, 2020 at 10:23 AM life’s melody limping.. Great write Sam..Good luck in the contest...

Line Gauthier May 12, 2020 at 8:36 AM Love the flow of this lovely poem, Sam.

Sam Kauffman May 12, 2020 at 1:08 AM Hi Andrea, thanks so much for your visit and your message. Hope you find a picture to go with your entry! Blessings my friend!

Andrea Dietrich May 11, 2020 at 8:00 PM oh my, I just realized seeing this gem, I did not notice PICTURES went with this contest. OH MY. Gotta start all over again