Lunch Exile

I'm in agony!
As the energy drains out!
Cruelest lunch, arrive!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Guzzi Avatar
February 1, 2011 at 7:08 AM
LOL very funny one here but not a haiku...it could kinda be a senyru...haiku form used NO capitalization or punctuation/ no title and is about nature, like a snapshot of a beauty so intense it's prayer like..to make this more senryu like you would write...gut's agony/the rumble of drained energy/lunch bell rings [So glad to hear from your island country I must google where you are!! WELCOME!] Light & love
Mehta Avatar
October 27, 2010 at 8:21 AM
Interesting and thoughtful haiku with nice images, Dominic
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October 26, 2010 at 7:39 PM
Welcome to Poetry Soup.. enjoyed reading your poetry tonight with its creative theme.. interesting Haiku which is usually about Nature .. hope u check out the contest page offered to new members ... good luck with luv..
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