Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Love Blind Duo-Rhyme

I used to clearly see your face
But now you’re gone; as if erased,
Misplaced, or hid, or left behind,
Or lost somewhere inside my mind
I want you back; my heart is twined -
A Celtic knot I can’t unwind 
That aches your loss; I feel consigned
To memory’s unfair design
How can I love you, yet be blind?
You’re still a blank, still undefined
I keep on searching, frantic paced
I need to fill this empty space…


7/11/12

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Sara Kendrick August 10, 2012 at 1:39 PM Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown August 9, 2012 at 10:44 AM A well deserved placement for you in the Duo-Rhyme contest. Congratulations Susan. Love, Carol

Dinda Minardi August 6, 2012 at 9:12 AM A very heartfelt write, Susan. I love your wordplay here.

Nette Onclaud August 6, 2012 at 1:05 AM love the sublime images here, susan... sweet congrats on your win!..:) huggs

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders August 5, 2012 at 12:54 PM You always take my breath away with your poignant poetry, Susan! Another one to my fav's...congrats on your awesome win! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Debbie Guzzi August 4, 2012 at 6:31 AM sigh..me & you both! [glad to see a bit of sophistication brought to this simple form] Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Joseph May August 4, 2012 at 4:49 AM nice write Susan....congrats on your win...love...Joseph

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl August 4, 2012 at 4:00 AM Congratulations Susan, a well deserved win.xx

David Williams August 4, 2012 at 2:19 AM Susan congrats on your win,I love the Idea of the celtic knot line.. David...did you get my test email??

Connie Marcum Wong August 4, 2012 at 12:20 AM A lovely emotional tug on the heart with this winning entry Susan. Congratulations on your third place win.

Olusegun Arowolo August 3, 2012 at 7:02 PM Awesome and wonderful piece,Susan...Very romantic...Nice going.."How can I love you,yet be blind?"...Congratulations on your superb win...

Andrea Dietrich August 3, 2012 at 6:59 PM Susan, the Celtic knot had me all wrapped up in this one!! I love the clever way you presented your message of love's frustration within this duo-rhyme form. I know you told me it was difficult for you to write this kind of poetry but you CAME THROUGH, lady. You did GREAT, and big congrats on your well deserved win!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 2, 2012 at 8:36 AM beautiful and bittersweet Susan.. u did wonderful rhyme sequences too.. emotional.. best wishes .. know Andrea will luv it.. as I do..

William Hughes July 17, 2012 at 11:04 AM There's a lot of feeling in this poem. I enjoyed it. Thank you.

Joann Grisetti July 16, 2012 at 9:00 AM Your lines flow into one another so well, the poem just slips off the page into my mind. Beautiful.

Russell Sivey July 15, 2012 at 11:13 AM Wow, Susan, you have impressed me a lot with this incredible write my friend! You have put together a great masterpiece here I believe! I really enjoyed reading this fine poem this afternoon, you'll do excellent in Andrea's contest! Great Work!!

Kim Merryman July 14, 2012 at 3:01 PM Well written, Susan. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Kim

David Williams July 14, 2012 at 1:16 PM Susan I like it, good luck..David

Michael J. Falotico July 14, 2012 at 12:14 PM A rhyme from the heart. Heartfelt piece my dear poet friend. Hugs n luv Michael

Carol Sunshine Brown July 14, 2012 at 12:01 PM Wishing you the best in Andrea's contest Susan. Love, carol

Sherese Gooden July 14, 2012 at 10:06 AM Good. Moving poetry.

Richard Palmer July 14, 2012 at 9:52 AM loveeeeee your rhyme BES,GREAT WORK