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Love Birds

Birds that hum in two Clothed in dyed colour and hue Spit a kiss then coo

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/20/2009 1:53:00 PM

well..very different! can birds spit? Light & Love (it made me smile!)

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 5/29/2009 1:12:00 PM

good one, but where have u disappeared my bro?

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 1/4/2009 9:53:00 PM

Superb rhyming and flow... a charming HAIKU my friend! Best wishes, Keith

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 9/18/2008 2:38:00 PM

I like your rhyming sequence. This is an excellent piece and it flows very well. I can see the images of the love birds quite clearly. Great job! ~Joseph

Sara Lokken

Date: 8/5/2008 7:00:00 PM

Lovely haiku--naturistic and picturesque. Thanks for the comment on mine. Regards, Sara:)

Derrick Burton

Date: 7/31/2008 11:09:00 PM

another great poem

Ryan Cc

Date: 7/20/2008 7:55:00 PM

and by the way it's the Ateneo in Manila. Just erase this comment, thanks!

Ryan Cc

Date: 7/20/2008 7:42:00 PM

Sure sounds like you're stalking me, hehehe. Yup, Ateneo, graduated last year. And was it a C? hahaha. What subject was it, bet it was project management, or networking. And yes, I do have a Friendster account, I just don't use my name, and no workshops for me. Feel free to erase this comment (this is getting a lot like ym to me...). Are there any other questions you'd like to ask, inspector? I'd give you my email, but I can't post it here. Cheers!

Ryan Cc

Date: 7/18/2008 3:40:00 AM

Haven't tried out the haiku yet,but this one's really well made. Not a word is out of place. And by the way, 22,manila.

Farah Chamma

Date: 7/17/2008 3:27:00 PM

That's a wonderful Haiku...You captured it perfectly... Always, Farah

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 7/16/2008 4:41:00 AM

This is written in perfect form and the flow and words zbring the imagery to life for the reader making for a wonderful read. Michael

Brian Strand

Date: 7/13/2008 12:46:00 AM

You capture the image so well Gino.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Charles Fuller

Date: 7/9/2008 2:27:00 PM

Thaks for the comment of my poetry GiNo. You have a gift I do not, haiku. I have tried but thet just dn't feel right to me. A very beatiful poem. My best, Charlie

Michael Jordan

Date: 7/9/2008 7:08:00 AM

I loved this Haiku - outstanding use of this form

Date: 7/8/2008 6:23:00 PM

Thank you for allowing me to smile with this poem. Nice use of this short format. I just found out that The Soup was up today. Thank you for your kind words regarding my poem. Keep on writing. Have a good day! Karen

Sharon Winter

Date: 7/7/2008 5:23:00 AM

Yes, their color is brilliant. A perfectly clear vision in this well done haiku. If I didn't have cats, I might just have a pair myself. They are so beautiful. Love, Shar