Love and Triumph (Please Critique This Poem)
How much I love you.
It's easy to describe.
My feelings are as strong as
the movement of a fierce earthquake.
You have captured
my heart with your strong hands and eyes.
My love for you has lingered
for as long as
I can remember, my love's deep.
I know my feelings are true.
Why can't you love like that?
I think my day has come.
I saw you looking
at me, with your big, beautiful brown eyes.
You came towards me and planted a big kiss.
My love has been rewarded.
(I wrote this poem when I was in the 10th grade. I know the poem is patterned after a poem
called Martial Choreograph that was written by Maya Angelou. Does anybody know what
type of poem it was?)
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