Alexis Y. Poet Rhyme

Lost Swirl

Long ago there was a girl
who liked to just twirl

Folk thought she was mad
And that made her sad

So one day she stopped
Her cheerful spirit dropped

And from that day on
All her swirls had gone

Alexis Y.
12-17-17

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Freddie Robinson Jr. December 23, 2017 at 2:34 PM Oh, no ... that girl needs her swirl back! Fine poem, Alexis. Maybe there's a two-part to this story perhaps. Lovely sad poem, dear friend. Love and joy always.

FJ Thomas December 20, 2017 at 1:18 PM Oh so sad; we need those twirlers even more today. Lovely Alexis.

Silent One December 19, 2017 at 7:23 AM A bit like Billy Elliot.. I hope she gets her swirls back...

Demetrios Trifiatis December 19, 2017 at 2:44 AM A intresting storry written in an arful way dearest Alexis! Merry Christmas

Akkina Downing December 18, 2017 at 7:07 PM This reminded me of when I was that little. I would twirl until I got so dizzy and the earth beneath my feet felt like it was spinning... Lol! This poem is so good! I enjoyed it very much. Great job Alexis! Hugs and smiles :)

Joseph May December 18, 2017 at 7:01 PM Each expression is unique..nicely penned Alexis

Connie Marcum Wong December 18, 2017 at 4:22 PM Children love to twirl around until they become dizzy. I love to watch it when my five-year-old granddaughter spins around and gets off-balance. It's so cute as is your poem Alexis! : )

Richard Lamoureux December 18, 2017 at 1:01 PM There is a book called "Reviving Ophelia" and it deals with how society removes the primal joy from a girls heart. This is well expressed.

Cheryl Hoffman December 18, 2017 at 9:34 AM Whoever this is written about I hope she keeps on twirling as John stated so wonderfully! Nicely penned Alexis & thank you so much for comment on my recent poem which was quite a challenge my poet friend!~Che :))

John Gondolf December 18, 2017 at 5:09 AM Sometimes if we try to conform to everyone else we lose our spirit and fire. Nicely stated, Alexis. John Alexis Y. December 18, 2017 at 8:52 AM Hi John, What a good response to my poem . You made it look easy. I appreciate that you stopped by today my friend:-) Alexis

Arthur Vaso December 17, 2017 at 11:55 PM I wish I could make her twirl, cheerful should exist always! Loved the poem! Alexis Y. December 18, 2017 at 8:46 AM Hi Arthur, Thank you so much . I'm glad you stopped by :-) Alexis

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 17, 2017 at 10:06 PM This is so sad, joy crushed. Fantastic penning. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart December 18, 2017 at 9:09 AM It's a hellova contest prompt, I keep hoping my muse bites! Alexis Y. December 18, 2017 at 8:49 AM Hi Maureen, Thank you so much. I appreciate you being the first to comment on my poem. I didn't understand the requirements. But I think you can rise to the challenge:-) Alexis