Lost Swirl

Long ago there was a girl who liked to just twirl Folk thought she was mad And that made her sad So one day she stopped Her cheerful spirit dropped And from that day on All her swirls had gone Alexis Y. 12-17-17

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/23/2017 2:34:00 PM

Oh, no ... that girl needs her swirl back! Fine poem, Alexis. Maybe there's a two-part to this story perhaps. Lovely sad poem, dear friend. Love and joy always.

Fj Thomas

Date: 12/20/2017 1:18:00 PM

Oh so sad; we need those twirlers even more today. Lovely Alexis.

Silent One

Date: 12/19/2017 7:23:00 AM

A bit like Billy Elliot.. I hope she gets her swirls back...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/19/2017 2:44:00 AM

A intresting storry written in an arful way dearest Alexis! Merry Christmas

Akkina Downing

Date: 12/18/2017 7:07:00 PM

This reminded me of when I was that little. I would twirl until I got so dizzy and the earth beneath my feet felt like it was spinning... Lol! This poem is so good! I enjoyed it very much. Great job Alexis! Hugs and smiles :)

Joseph May

Date: 12/18/2017 7:01:00 PM

Each expression is unique..nicely penned Alexis

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/18/2017 4:22:00 PM

Children love to twirl around until they become dizzy. I love to watch it when my five-year-old granddaughter spins around and gets off-balance. It's so cute as is your poem Alexis! : )

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/18/2017 1:01:00 PM

There is a book called "Reviving Ophelia" and it deals with how society removes the primal joy from a girls heart. This is well expressed.

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 12/18/2017 9:34:00 AM

Whoever this is written about I hope she keeps on twirling as John stated so wonderfully! Nicely penned Alexis & thank you so much for comment on my recent poem which was quite a challenge my poet friend!~Che :))

John Gondolf

Date: 12/18/2017 5:09:00 AM

Sometimes if we try to conform to everyone else we lose our spirit and fire. Nicely stated, Alexis. John

Alexis Y.
Date: 12/18/2017 8:52:00 AM

Hi John, What a good response to my poem . You made it look easy. I appreciate that you stopped by today my friend:-) Alexis

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/17/2017 11:55:00 PM

I wish I could make her twirl, cheerful should exist always! Loved the poem!

Alexis Y.
Date: 12/18/2017 8:46:00 AM

Hi Arthur, Thank you so much . I'm glad you stopped by :-) Alexis

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 12/17/2017 10:06:00 PM

This is so sad, joy crushed. Fantastic penning.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 12/18/2017 9:09:00 AM

It's a hellova contest prompt, I keep hoping my muse bites!

Alexis Y.
Date: 12/18/2017 8:49:00 AM

Hi Maureen, Thank you so much. I appreciate you being the first to comment on my poem. I didn't understand the requirements. But I think you can rise to the challenge:-) Alexis