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Such a sad and heartbreaking illness...the loss of mind. I worked in New York City for 17 years and I have come across many a sad site. Witnessing some of the cities ugliest pictures...those of the mindless, those who blurt out sayings that make absolutely no sense at all...those who no longer have a functional mind. You just can't help to feel sorry for them...I have thought to myself many a time...what in god's creation made them that way, what has happened to them. I will never complain about my life again.

Loss of Mental Stability

of course the moon cries...
there are green tangerines browned
and...the soup is mashed 


Senryu on Mind Poetry Contest  
1-28-2020 
Judged 2-3-2020

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Anne-Lise Andresen

February 5, 2020 at 4:11 AM

- Congratulations, Charlie :) - Enjoy reading it :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Sam Kauffman

February 4, 2020 at 10:46 PM

Such a stunning senryu Charlie! Wonderful imagery. Congratulation on your placement. Well done.

Andrea Dietrich

February 4, 2020 at 3:29 PM

charles, this is a VERY good one that you wrote. I love the imagery you used for this sad condition. Congrats on the winners' list.

Jenish Somadas

February 4, 2020 at 12:44 AM

Thank you for participating in the contest with your wonderful Senryu Charles.. I'm honoured..

Charmaine Chircop

January 31, 2020 at 2:41 PM

Fantastic senryu...my dad suffers from depression..and once long time ago He used to be a very healthy man.It takes only one straw on a life of pressure which can turn the mind insane..apart from other conditions..or life experirnces one passed through.Thanks for sharing.

Kai Michael Neumann

January 29, 2020 at 6:08 AM

Mashed soup indeed and gratitude.

Tom Cunningham

January 29, 2020 at 5:58 AM

A sad write Charlie, there are many who are lost deep within themselves. Tom

Harry Horsman

January 28, 2020 at 11:34 PM

Love this Charles, unique senryu, so sad the theme, and so well you bring it across..

Juliet Ligon

January 28, 2020 at 11:33 PM

Such a sad thought and you expressed it an interesting way.

Maria Williams

January 28, 2020 at 9:44 PM

In a mish mash of words some do stand out, like this Senyru of yours Charlie, you got me thinking of green tangerines browned :) and the soup being mashed. I quite agree though, the saddest thing to witness is the loss of a functional mind. Good luck in the contest my friend....Maria Hugs