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Such a sad and heartbreaking illness...the loss of mind. I worked in New York City for 17 years and I have come across many a sad site. Witnessing some of the cities ugliest pictures...those of the mindless, those who blurt out sayings that make absolutely no sense at all...those who no longer have a functional mind. You just can't help to feel sorry for them...I have thought to myself many a time...what in god's creation made them that way, what has happened to them. I will never complain about my life again. 

Loss of Mental Stability

of course the moon cries...
there are green tangerines browned
and...the soup is mashed 


Senryu on Mind Poetry Contest  
1-28-2020 
Judged 2-3-2020

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 2/5/2020 4:11:00 AM
- Congratulations, Charlie :) - Enjoy reading it :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/4/2020 10:46:00 PM
Such a stunning senryu Charlie! Wonderful imagery. Congratulation on your placement. Well done.
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Date: 2/4/2020 3:29:00 PM
charles, this is a VERY good one that you wrote. I love the imagery you used for this sad condition. Congrats on the winners' list.
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Date: 2/4/2020 12:44:00 AM
Thank you for participating in the contest with your wonderful Senryu Charles.. I'm honoured..
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Date: 1/31/2020 2:41:00 PM
Fantastic senryu...my dad suffers from depression..and once long time ago He used to be a very healthy man.It takes only one straw on a life of pressure which can turn the mind insane..apart from other conditions..or life experirnces one passed through.Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 1/29/2020 6:08:00 AM
Mashed soup indeed and gratitude.
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Date: 1/29/2020 5:58:00 AM
A sad write Charlie, there are many who are lost deep within themselves. Tom
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Date: 1/28/2020 11:34:00 PM
Love this Charles, unique senryu, so sad the theme, and so well you bring it across..
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Date: 1/28/2020 11:33:00 PM
Such a sad thought and you expressed it an interesting way.
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Date: 1/28/2020 9:44:00 PM
In a mish mash of words some do stand out, like this Senyru of yours Charlie, you got me thinking of green tangerines browned :) and the soup being mashed. I quite agree though, the saddest thing to witness is the loss of a functional mind. Good luck in the contest my friend....Maria Hugs
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Date: 1/28/2020 9:19:00 PM
Great imagery...so sad
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