Mystic Rose Rose Poet Rhyme

Lord Take Me To Heaven Don'T Be So Mean

Like a deer caught in spotlight by tip of the antler 
she froze when she saw the upcoming train 
with a slow motion move like an Austrian landler 
she ran from the danger, her only domain 

The night was so frozen it held every tear 
unable to move she just sat  on the rail 
her heart was a pumping the moon was a smear 
as she wiped out the gravel and pulled out the nail 

The stars were now shining but she couldn't see 
the beauty of sky the fabric of green 
for night was a falling, she made one last plea 
Lord take me to heaven, don't be so mean. 

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Joanna Daniel February 22, 2023 at 11:47 PM The angst of the young woman caught between death and the pains of life is wonderfully brought out, Vie:)

Yann Rolland February 22, 2023 at 11:08 PM this is so beautiful, but i flee desperation when i Can, thanks for sharing, this is poignant and emotive yann

Vijay Pandit February 22, 2023 at 7:07 AM I hear the cry of despair, seeking an escape to heaven. A well written emotive poem, Vienna. Mystic Rose Rose February 22, 2023 at 9:26 AM Thank you Vijay, many young people these days are not equipped for the hardships. Often they give up,

Victor Buhagiar February 22, 2023 at 7:04 AM A heartfelt poem. God is not mean. He will take it to Heaven. Lovely poem. Hugs. Mystic Rose Rose February 22, 2023 at 9:25 AM Thanks Victor, its a bout a girl who has had enough pain and tries to commit suicide but changes her mind.