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Rows and Rows of Angelic faces Dressed in dreams vows and laces Tied with promises at the Alter Words exchanged and now we Falter. Darkness and dots blur my vision Drowning in tears of confusion Please help me to swim back to shore My heart split open, how much more? My mind swirls around the possibility That we can work out this hostility Believing you when I look into your eyes Putting joy back into my heart, never wanting to hear goodbye's. If only I could stop watching my back Tired now, of losing track Drowning again with you standing above watching me Pushing my head under, I drown again, I cannot see. 17.12.2020 'A Rhyme Story-Poem with Eyes On' Sponsor: Mystic Rose Rose.

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Sigrid Ermine

Date: 12/25/2020 2:37:00 PM

Carol, Congratulations. I was immediately struck by the accessibility and neat format of your poem. Indeed, it leaves readers impacted by the turmoil the protagonist experiences. A very worthy entry here and deserved Winner.

Carol Mitra
Date: 12/25/2020 11:32:00 PM

Thanks dear Sigrid....A reality faced by many who accept this terrible fate.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/23/2020 11:28:00 AM

Very powerful and emotive Carol. This poem is a plea to heaven! Well done. Congratulations on your win! Merry Christmas!

Carol Mitra
Date: 12/23/2020 10:50:00 PM

Thanks dear Sam....yes you can say it is....Merry Christmas to you too :)

Jenna Logan

Date: 12/23/2020 9:12:00 AM

A well written sad poem, Carol, and congratulations on winning 3rd place.

Carol Mitra
Date: 12/23/2020 10:49:00 PM

Thanks dear Jenna....I have seen my own sister suffer and would not wish it on my worst enemy....much appreciated.

Eve Roper

Date: 12/23/2020 7:35:00 AM

Great write, Carol, it makes me feel those deep sad emotions. Congratulations on your 3rd place win. Hugs Eve

Carol Mitra
Date: 12/23/2020 8:35:00 AM

Thanks dear Eve....much appreciated.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 12/23/2020 6:02:00 AM

Congrats on this wonderful poem. So glad to see it in a top placement. God B L E S S you

Carol Mitra
Date: 12/23/2020 8:35:00 AM

Thanks dear Regina....much appreciated.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/23/2020 5:53:00 AM

You wrote this in the I tense, which is not an easy endeavor. You captured her feelings very well, Thank you for joining my contest, congratulations on your 3rd place win. Love and Light, your Mystic R.

Carol Mitra
Date: 12/23/2020 8:34:00 AM

Thank you Mystic Rose.....yes hers and many like her....much appreciated.