Gordon Mcconnell Poet Rhyme

Looking Out From Within

It's an awfully strange feeling
been in here now for a while
don't  really want to leave
but maybe it's cramping my style

This little body of mine
seems to grow more each day
feels bigger and stronger
but is it really the way?

What kind of world is out there?
well I've got to be brave
if I keep growing at this rate
who knows what I might crave

I hear a thumping in my chest
it seems it beats to a rhyme
hey this could be key to life
worth more than any dime

Hey how was I made?
I must be a divine creation
God only God it could be
oh my what a revelation!

AUTHOR NOTES: Just imagining being an unborn baby about to be born. Describing my feelings as I enter the world.

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Jeannie Cronin February 14, 2016 at 10:30 PM Hi Gordon, this is a great poem and a cool perspective. The second stanza seemed more like the mothers thoughts to me, interesting twist. In keeping the write consistent with the unborn first person perspective, a few minor changes would do the trick! Nicely done, can't wait to read more! Gordon Mcconnell February 15, 2016 at 4:07 AM thanks again Jeannie, it was a strange one to do trying to put oneself in such situation, thanks again for your ongoing encouragement!