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Lily of the Valley

A woodland beauty lures with teary eyes
Her scented sweetness lingers in the air, 
Conceals a blemish under virgin guise
A woodland beauty lures with teary eyes
Like Eve bemoans her loss of paradise.
She flaunts aesthetics with a flare to dare.
A woodland beauty lures with teary eyes,
Her scented sweetness lingers in the air. 

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Using (English version) Pentameter ~ each line has 
10 syllables (5 metrical feet).
* teary … Lily of the Valley is also known as Mary’s Tears
[Legend has it that Lily of the Valley sprang from Eve's tears 
when she was exiled from the Garden of Eden.]
**blemish … the Lily of the Valley is poisonous
***flare … indirect reference to ‘bell-shaped’ flowers

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Contest: Celebrate May with a Triolet
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich 
Placed 3rd
© 5th May 2019

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 12/4/2020 6:02:00 PM

Sad and beautiful at the same time :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/5/2020 8:21:00 AM

Thank you, Angela. Have a lovely day. Regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 5/19/2019 5:50:00 AM

Beautiful write Paul, I never knew that it was also called Mary's Tears, Congrats on your win..

Paul Callus
Date: 5/19/2019 8:17:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph. Learning is a never ending process :) Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/18/2019 4:52:00 PM

Lily of the Valley is one of my favorite flowers, Paul, and your lovely poem pays it tribute well. Also, I learned a lot that I did not know before! Congratulations on your Podium win! Sandra :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/18/2019 6:23:00 PM

So pleased that you found it to your liking, Sandra...thank you. Goodnight // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 5/18/2019 1:55:00 AM

beautiful and informative too with the poets notes:-) many congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/18/2019 5:43:00 AM

Thank you, Jan. Truly enjoyed your first-placed entry....hope you found a good place where to display your glittering trophy:) Hugs // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/17/2019 2:34:00 PM

Lovely, Paul. Congrats on your podium finish.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2019 3:09:00 PM

Thank you, Line. Pleased you enjoyed. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 5/16/2019 7:35:00 PM

I’m so pleased to return with my congratulations for your wonderful win with your beautiful Triolet, Paul. Your talent inspires me, my dear friend. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2019 1:56:00 PM

A double Thank You for a double visit, Susan! We are able to inspire one another...that is the beauty of sharing, my friend. Warm regards & Hugs and have an enjoyable weekend. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/15/2019 6:48:00 PM

So happy to be in your great company Paul. I am surprised as there were so many gorgeous entries like this one! Congratulations on your win my friend! Please post this at PFT. hugs, Connie : ) xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/16/2019 10:49:00 AM

Have just realized that the results are out, Connie. Will go see where we placed. Thank you for reading and liking...and for the congrats! REgards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2019 5:36:00 PM

Very well crafted poetry, Paul. Congratulations in my contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/16/2019 10:46:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I'll now go see the results. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 5/14/2019 8:53:00 PM

Oh, your poem is as alluring as it is exceptional, Paul. Your imagery, rhythm and rhyme is enchanting and your notes are excellent. I most certainly enjoyed being lured by this woodland beauty. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes and hugs for you, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 5/15/2019 9:17:00 AM

Thank you very much, Susan. I don't usually insert notes, but in this case I felt they were necessary because we readers often miss out on what the writer actually has in mind. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 5/9/2019 2:26:00 PM

love this very clever write, my friend - a sure winner

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2019 6:27:00 AM

Thank you, my friend. A while ago I read your entry, and I am of the same opinion as yours:) Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/8/2019 8:38:00 PM

May is my birth month Paul and so of course I love the lily of the valley. They are such a delicate flower with a lovely scent. I appreciate your information about Eve's tears which I did not know. This is outstanding Paul! Best for a high placement my friend. I have only written one, ever, for this contest. It is a difficult challenging form for me. : ) xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2019 9:39:00 AM

May is a beautiful month, Connie,and you're lucky to have your birthday in it. Thank you for liking my poem; I am sure your entry will be as lovely as your poetry always is. ~ Warm regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/8/2019 2:39:00 PM

such a fascinating write on a flower of spring matched with rhythmic wonder, paul... another gem from you...huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2019 8:48:00 AM

Thank you...you are too kind, Nette! Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/8/2019 8:35:00 AM

Best of luck in the contest - forecast a win! Hugs, Jenny.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2019 8:41:00 AM

Thank you for the faith you show in it, Jenny :) Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/8/2019 8:33:00 AM

I enjoyed your verse Paul and your explanation was helpful - you are a talented poet( which I have always maintained), but what I find wondrous and delightful is your adventurous spirit alway evident in your various forms of poetry. Great write Paul, hugs, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2019 8:42:00 AM

Thank you, Jenny...your complimentary remarks and lovely comments are much appreciated, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul