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ammil: The glittering layer of ice that dusts leaves, twigs, and grass after a freeze.

CONTRAST: I've layered contrasts across imagery, tone, and rhythm. The hemispheric straddle is implied through seasonal cues, but the deeper contrasts—joy vs. discord, movement vs. stillness, warmth vs. frost—give the poem its tension and resonance.

For Andrea’s December themed contest – 2025: Trois-par-Huit Ammil landscape—Photograph by John Macfarlane (2018)

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Movie clips
of coloured cocktail sips—
voices of children in pool recoil.

The ancient family feuds in which to embroil.
My reality becomes an unwelcome foil.

A silk dress with a white lacy frill—-
my reflection now still
like ammil.

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Jenish Somadas

December 24, 2025 at 9:26 PM

noise and color outside, stillness and estrangement within.. Beautifully done Suzette.. Congrats on your win.. Merry Christmas..

Suzette Richards

December 26, 2025 at 12:05 AM

Thanks for reading, Jenish - yes, you 'get me'. :) Merry Christmas

Andrea Dietrich

December 24, 2025 at 8:08 PM

Reading what you replied to Paige. Yes. It was a bit obscure for me. I even looked up Ammil and I kind of got it, especially the first part. It is very original and intelligent. Probably if I were not the type who loved lucid poetry, I would have scored it higher. I loved the part about the silk dress with frill. Sounds so nostalgic. Congrats . You did very well in my contest

Suzette Richards

December 26, 2025 at 3:29 AM

PS I was referring to the poetic form being *obscure*.

Suzette Richards

December 26, 2025 at 12:04 AM

Guess that is just not my style:) Thanks for the 2nd group placement, Andrea.

Paige Hind

December 9, 2025 at 6:14 PM

Looks like you've had your moment of genius here- what an unique and very personal take on this contest!! A Fav

Suzette Richards

December 9, 2025 at 8:49 PM

I do like this somewhat obscure form and have not written any examples for my books since 2019. Thanks for reading and your kind comment, Paige. At this time of year, I straddle the two hemispheres - staying or visiting one, while the rest of my family is in the other.

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