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The tormented cries of a heart confined Barely ever met a gratifying end The meager state is but a trick of your mind For the course of destiny lies in your own hand Forsaken love, a conceivable excuse For a shattered being, to give up life It is but a presumption, erroneously abstruse For success greets those who dare to survive No past, no fate, that He Cannot Mend Or an ill-fated tale to have ever spawned Never lose hope, however evident the end For night is the darkest just before dawn By M. Hussain Effendi (In reply to the poem "Estranged Love" posted by M. Taha Effendi)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/4/2012 3:29:00 PM
This is a favorite of mine, Mr. Effendi. I do wish you would give us some more of your fine writing. Thank you for reading my work. daver
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Date: 12/3/2011 8:58:00 AM
Good morning..lol..your comment got me a bit confused... but, thats okay..yes the poem is for an example for the contest... You should try out the contest..I would love to see a new poem of yours... have a nice and lovley day,..p..d
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Date: 11/14/2011 7:34:00 PM
Just keeping in touch luv, never get tired of reading your poems. Hope all is well with you.
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Date: 11/1/2011 6:02:00 PM
That is a very awesome piece!!! I especially love the 7th and 8th line. Wow. Inspirational Always, Laura
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Date: 11/1/2011 12:32:00 PM
I especially like the last line first stanza and the last line of the work even though it is said a lot..Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting on my work...Sara
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Date: 10/25/2011 2:54:00 PM
I especially like the second stanza - "dare to survive." Had to laugh at that one, my being 82 years old. Congrats on the selection. Love, daver
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Date: 10/25/2011 5:51:00 AM
I really try my hardest in holding on to hope... but, in my situation, i think darkness always over shines my light... don't worry,, i still have plenty of light in me.. For some reason I can't stop the torment in my life.. do you happen to think "IT IS I THAT FORSAKEN MYSELF"".. well anyways.. enjoyed your poem this morning... by the way... a late congratulations on your featured poem,,, take care,..p.d.
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Date: 10/21/2011 6:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Hussain
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Date: 10/21/2011 5:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week M.. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/12/2011 1:56:00 PM
"success greets those who dare to survive." Really like this line. Congrats on the selection. daver
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Date: 10/9/2011 10:40:00 PM
Congrats Hussain on featured poem this week on PS... a wonderful write to share luv...
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Date: 10/8/2011 3:19:00 PM
Hussain, like Elizabeth, I had to come back and read this one again. It's filled with a depth of sadness that many, if not most of us contemplate sooner or later in our lives. Good poetry makes us think about the unthinkable and this one does it admirably well. Also, thanks for your compliments and thoughts on some of my more recent poetry as well. I sincerely appreciate your visits and kind thoughts on things we both find worthy of purposful consideration. Thanks again and jolly well done.
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Date: 10/6/2011 2:56:00 PM
I've found it takes courage to suvive, then success comes, sometime it's a long time. I always find something new to probe the mind with new thoughts in your verse Hussain. And thanks for your sweet visit and comments, they make my day. I wrote you a fun one about the nose to put you in better humor. Luv, Lizzy
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Date: 9/23/2011 9:17:00 AM
Hussain, this reminds me very much of my most recent poem, "Loneliness." It was kind of you to respond to "Estranged Love" which I'm promted to read next in order to complete the circle. Thank you as well for your kind comments concerning "If I Could Reach Across the Miles." You're a good neighbor my friend! Peace...
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Date: 9/18/2011 2:32:00 PM
Wonderful write Hussain...very well penned... i look forward to reading more of your works....smiles...chiquita
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Date: 9/6/2011 5:09:00 PM
Wonderfully penned verses with such lucid thought-provoking expressions. Its a classic!
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Date: 8/12/2011 11:30:00 PM
thankxx for your beautiful comment on my poetry about the soldiers.. wishing the war was ended in every country ..luv.. my youngest son of five serves in Air Force in Libya now.. protecting us all.. thankxxx...
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Date: 8/11/2011 8:02:00 AM
Today I have stopped back to read more of your excellent poetry M. I will be back again soon and hope to see some more poetry written here by you. If you feel it in your heart then write it as that is where the best poetry comes from. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/9/2011 8:41:00 PM
A wonderful verse Hussain, The last line is beautiful and sums up the whole verse with good thoughts.
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Date: 8/1/2011 8:05:00 AM
A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you M.. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol
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Date: 7/31/2011 11:45:00 PM
Welcome to the soup Hussain with this lovely poem. Keep on inspiring us.
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Date: 7/31/2011 9:16:00 PM
Very thought provoking expressions, M.Hussain
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Date: 7/31/2011 10:54:00 AM
Welcome to Poetry Soup... enjoy the site with its many features as u continue to share words of creative poetry with luv..as this piece...
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