I have drawn my material from observing the lives of others and parts of my own, so I guess this should
resonate with my readers.' all the best Joe.' I have just changed the word begins for the word start as it
seems better in the text, 18 1 2017.
You start with nothing, eveything to be gained.' And so the journey begins.. Choices are some of the heaviest loads you will encounter alomg the way, Bad choices, are the heaviest loads of all, these ones you can never put down' And so you carry on getting richer, or poorer; what can the onlooker tell? For they have their view, you have fame glam you have it made that's it to them, They don't see the doubt, the compromises made in turning from early values' The pressure to preform;becomes your norm, as an awful day begins its dawn Rich in goods and low in spirit, 'friends' don't care as long as you are kept 'in it' Long nights of glitz, days on the road; you need more space for the growing loads' Eyes that burn with unshed tears, popping pills and snorting; don't quell the fears Then there's a time when the dark one shows, he shadows your trail come or go He sometime uses others eyes, when they look at 'you' he's there inside' Its de ja vue, you know the score' you want out bad yet your'e soul's bit sore He want's to take you to darker roads, lit by the perverted lights of evils glow Let rage and anger surge inside, an excuse to cause hurt; and feed your pride' Despair's a part, it lies in wait; when you see its face it will be too late' There's a creeping lurking hideous thing. masquerading as your reality Its name is sin' there's only one who really cares. He faced the cross & that Same cold stare.. Its up to you; you know its true, despite the fog in your mind And the day that's through' He can take the loads that you don't even own Also all the things in your soul that's been sown, to cast them into the endless sea, so you can become rich with His Love that's free.'
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