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Life Cycle

Early morning I have to wake up and catch the train. Distance long and crowd among, early start the only way Mortgaged soul, lend heart and invested brain Up to this journey what I've lost and what is gain Calculated not what I posses and what to pay Mortgaged soul, lend heart and invested brain Daily spin the words, infertile ideas I toil to explain They call me *babu, office assistant you better say Early morning I have to wake up and catch the train. Contrary policies and balance to maintain Malice, greed, pride sharp word spikes and I’m the prey Mortgaged soul, lend heart and invested brain You know the story of rabbit visiting lion’s den Heap of bones, going in foot prints no signs out way Early morning I have to wake up and catch the train. Call it cycle of life or the destruction chain Earning sources, Means of livelihood taking lives away Early morning I have to wake up and catch the train. Mortgaged soul, lend heart and invested brain First time exprimenting with Villanelle poetic form. comments are welcome! babu is a common word for office clerk in India

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Date: 4/9/2014 5:57:00 PM
This is very good Neelam, I like when you write longer forms, it gives me more shades with which to enjoy your thinking.
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Neelam Sangwai
Date: 4/10/2014 10:18:00 PM
I 'll try for longer forms. Hearty Thanks and Regards!
Date: 4/9/2014 6:46:00 AM
Sorry I'm no expert on villanelle, but this sounds right. I fully agree with the sentiment. Well done.
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Neelam Sangwai
Date: 4/10/2014 10:17:00 PM
Hearty Thanks !
Date: 3/29/2014 5:15:00 AM
Neelman, you sly woman, I read this beautiful poem, you wrote from your heart. You know it, I know it, and everybody after, will agree. Keep writing, I'll be back.
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Neelam Sangwai
Date: 4/10/2014 10:17:00 PM
Hearty Thanks!

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