Laurentine G Poet Rhyme

Let's Minichu on Feelings of Neglect

a spiral of despair
in all truth we cannot reach for an absent hand
nothing there

the sun will rise
how can anyone understand 
dark skies

you cared
fixed on command
scared 

a spiral of despair
how can anyone understand
scared

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Mohan Chutani March 19, 2026 at 8:05 AM Laurentine, thanks for participating in my contest. The feelings of despair expressed by you shrouds out all rays of hope sometimes. Congratulations for your placement. Best. Mohan. Laurentine G March 19, 2026 at 8:12 AM Thank you Mohan - I'm happy to appear in the placements. Your form is always challenging but interesting to complete. Kind regards

Neve Vesalius March 16, 2026 at 7:57 AM I'm losing you but then I understand, I can catch onto pieces and then I can follow along Laurentine G March 16, 2026 at 8:11 AM It's a sponsor created form called the Minichu - specific syllables, rhyme and refrain. Have a go, it's in the contest list and form guidelines in the sponsors poem. Thank you engaging with this poem :) Neve Vesalius March 16, 2026 at 8:00 AM what form might it be Neve Vesalius March 16, 2026 at 8:00 AM I don't mean I'm confused but rather I relate to certain parts dramatically Laurentine G March 16, 2026 at 7:58 AM It's a contest write to a very specific form - understanding the form will likely unlock the meaning