Debbie Guzzi Poet Verse

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Let Me Come In

Suspended like a lemon drop
 on the tongue of night
the moon melts—

there was a child who eyed the sky
through his black lashes crows did fly

Haze, ever present,
on this humid September eve,
blurs the edges of reality
calling forth images 
	sweet beginnings
the howls of wolf—
the warmth of blood.

a teddy bear he held to him
Ma said the wolf cried—let me in

Fireflies fly near the 
sparkler’s
	spinning 
lamplight
bathes his white blanket in blue.

under the cover he runs boohoo
after all he was only two!



*2 rhythms- free verse & rhyming couplets

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Skat A February 16, 2015 at 12:10 AM Debbie, Nice Rock me around the clock win. ~Skat~

Olusegun Arowolo February 14, 2015 at 12:25 PM Splendid!Congrats on your well deserved win...

Debra Squyres February 13, 2015 at 8:09 PM I'm thinking I like these free form poems with mixed rhythms... you did this well !! Congratulations on your win !!

Eve Roper February 13, 2015 at 5:53 PM Congratulations on your win,Debbie, a 7 . Blessings Eve

Sandra Haight February 13, 2015 at 4:32 PM Such a great poem, Debbie. Congratulations on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison February 13, 2015 at 2:02 PM simply delightful write Debbie - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty February 13, 2015 at 1:58 AM Hi Debbie lemme come in to say CONGRATS.LOVE

Andrea Dietrich February 12, 2015 at 11:44 PM such a cute one, Debs, BIG congrats on your well deserved win.

Sheri Fresonke Harper February 12, 2015 at 9:14 PM Debbie, this was quite cute, congratulations on your placement. Thanks for entering my contest.

Paul Schneiter February 1, 2015 at 9:31 PM Debbie, this poem presents stunning imagery in rapid-fire fashion. It almost took my breath away. Wonderful and awesome. Thank you for writing it.

Funom Makama January 28, 2015 at 8:28 AM Great lines with blesed words. Thanks for the magnificient share. I hope the new year is going well so far..

Michelle Mac Donald January 16, 2015 at 3:04 PM I'm blown away by this piece!! Fairytales, yarns, and the actively extended mind of a two year old. Truly an amazing write Debs! The wonderous beginning is so very beautifully penned..."the moon melts-like lemon drop suspended on the tongue of night" :)LOVE IT! Keep well, love, Mikki

Maurice Yvonne January 16, 2015 at 1:12 PM A brilliant write. A Fav.

Harry Horsman January 13, 2015 at 3:19 PM This is wonderful Debbie,,i admire your skills with various forms, and you teach us much,,but at the end of the day,, the words still need to be sincere and meaningful,,,and in this you are number one... Debbie Guzzi January 13, 2015 at 3:27 PM Thank you so much Harry - folks here are my extended family, I CARE about what you all think of me & of my writing, I love it when I learn something new and so appreciate any correction people would like to suggest

Cherl Dunn January 13, 2015 at 1:28 PM This is an interesting work, a classy piece here Debbie well done, cheir

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 13, 2015 at 8:42 AM You expressed those childhood fears perfectly as well as the comforts! This is amazing poetry from first to last line...:))

Richard Lamoureux January 12, 2015 at 7:39 PM You have a way with words Debbie, love it.

David Meade January 11, 2015 at 10:26 PM The cry of the wolf still brings fear to my heart! Lovely and delightful! 7, fav

Wayne Sapp January 11, 2015 at 9:30 PM Loved the first three lines! Fun, make-you-smile poem.

Connie Marcum Wong January 11, 2015 at 8:18 PM Debbie, Your first lines drew me in and I couldn't stop reading until the end. This is really an exciting piece that lets the mind wander where it will with breathless anticipation! Loved it!