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Suspended like a lemon drop on the tongue of night the moon melts— there was a child who eyed the sky through his black lashes crows did fly Haze, ever present, on this humid September eve, blurs the edges of reality calling forth images sweet beginnings the howls of wolf— the warmth of blood. a teddy bear he held to him Ma said the wolf cried—let me in Fireflies fly near the sparkler’s spinning lamplight bathes his white blanket in blue. under the cover he runs boohoo after all he was only two! *2 rhythms- free verse & rhyming couplets

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Date: 2/16/2015 12:10:00 AM
Debbie, Nice Rock me around the clock win. ~Skat~
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Date: 2/14/2015 12:25:00 PM
Splendid!Congrats on your well deserved win...
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Date: 2/13/2015 8:09:00 PM
I'm thinking I like these free form poems with mixed rhythms... you did this well !! Congratulations on your win !!
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Date: 2/13/2015 5:53:00 PM
Congratulations on your win,Debbie, a 7 . Blessings Eve
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Date: 2/13/2015 4:32:00 PM
Such a great poem, Debbie. Congratulations on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/13/2015 2:02:00 PM
simply delightful write Debbie - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx
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Date: 2/13/2015 1:58:00 AM
Hi Debbie lemme come in to say CONGRATS.LOVE
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Date: 2/12/2015 11:44:00 PM
such a cute one, Debs, BIG congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 2/12/2015 9:14:00 PM
Debbie, this was quite cute, congratulations on your placement. Thanks for entering my contest.
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Date: 2/1/2015 9:31:00 PM
Debbie, this poem presents stunning imagery in rapid-fire fashion. It almost took my breath away. Wonderful and awesome. Thank you for writing it.
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Date: 1/28/2015 8:28:00 AM
Great lines with blesed words. Thanks for the magnificient share. I hope the new year is going well so far..
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Date: 1/16/2015 3:04:00 PM
I'm blown away by this piece!! Fairytales, yarns, and the actively extended mind of a two year old. Truly an amazing write Debs! The wonderous beginning is so very beautifully penned..."the moon melts-like lemon drop suspended on the tongue of night" :)LOVE IT! Keep well, love, Mikki
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Date: 1/16/2015 1:12:00 PM
A brilliant write. A Fav.
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Date: 1/13/2015 3:19:00 PM
This is wonderful Debbie,,i admire your skills with various forms, and you teach us much,,but at the end of the day,, the words still need to be sincere and meaningful,,,and in this you are number one...
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/13/2015 3:27:00 PM
Thank you so much Harry - folks here are my extended family, I CARE about what you all think of me & of my writing, I love it when I learn something new and so appreciate any correction people would like to suggest
Date: 1/13/2015 1:28:00 PM
This is an interesting work, a classy piece here Debbie well done, cheir
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Date: 1/13/2015 8:42:00 AM
You expressed those childhood fears perfectly as well as the comforts! This is amazing poetry from first to last line...:))
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Date: 1/12/2015 7:39:00 PM
You have a way with words Debbie, love it.
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Date: 1/11/2015 10:26:00 PM
The cry of the wolf still brings fear to my heart! Lovely and delightful! 7, fav
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Date: 1/11/2015 9:30:00 PM
Loved the first three lines! Fun, make-you-smile poem.
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Date: 1/11/2015 8:18:00 PM
Debbie, Your first lines drew me in and I couldn't stop reading until the end. This is really an exciting piece that lets the mind wander where it will with breathless anticipation! Loved it!
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