Let Me Be


 Baffled by viscous thoughts of life
    you traverse a road with rocks in strife,
 a faint whisper echoes in your broken sleep
    through topaz waves dreams emerge to reap.
 A heart holding an innocent lucid streak
    hums simmering desires to reach their peak.

  If pain overflows tender souls in dark
    a voice cuddles their ember agony spark,
  incandescent memories calling you in glee
    a lullaby dissolving that flame...let me be.

  Death could be a passenger you'd meet someday
   approaching your ship on a taciturn bay,
 what if hurricanes engulf a stormy sea
   a lifeboat to rescue that ship...let me be.

 Words wrapped in paranoia wavering bleak
   failing to unlock scared doors that are weak,
 your shriveled wishes waiting to be free
   a key of soothing answers at dusk...let me be.

 A love that shimmers in dusky brown eyes
   amazed yet reluctant burning in draped guise,
 a tender melody to hold it forever I see
   a night that melts your heart...let me be.

  Darling, you've waged a valiant war for long
    warrior of veiled emotions, you are too strong,
  reveal unmasked layers of tenderness, they plea
    a healing zenith of pearly stars...let me be.


August 1, 2020

Heart Truth Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Chantelle Anne Cooke
~Winner: 1st Place

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Salome Dove

September 6, 2026 at 12:49 AM

I love everything you write. I feel like it's written for me, haha. Thank you for that. Wish I could talk to you personally.

William Kelii Kekaula

August 14, 2020 at 11:10 AM

Nicely done, Aditi, as your words are released from your your heart easily filled with grace, blessings for your honorable 1st Place win and, Aloha! William

Andrew Crisci

August 12, 2020 at 5:07 PM

Congratulations on your big win, Aditi. Your beautiful words convey beautiful images and profound emotions. I love the line, " Reveal unmasked layers of tenderness. Thank you for your comment on my poem. Be well and stay safe.

Paula Goldsmith

August 10, 2020 at 8:23 AM

Congratulations on your win. Another wonderful write. Your pen is working overtime. Enjoy your wonderful win and day...............

Anne-Lise Andresen

August 10, 2020 at 5:44 AM

- Congratulations on your top win, Aditi :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Anisha Dutta

August 9, 2020 at 9:19 PM

BIG CONGRATS to Topper always. Poetic touch in each line towhelm the reader.

John Watt

August 9, 2020 at 4:13 PM

Excellent poetry, congratulations on your #1 win for this in the Heart Truth contest, Aditi! Blessings to you ~ John

Greg Gaul

August 9, 2020 at 3:24 PM

Congratulations Aditi for this masterful verse of couplets with a stylish repeating "let me be" phrase. Powerful use of language supports your strong, passionate content. Certainly a well-deserved win. Bravo.

John Watt

August 8, 2020 at 10:33 PM

Another amazing write, my friend. It begins strong, "Baffled by viscous thoughts of life" and never lets up in intensity of emotion and breathtaking poetic soulfulness. Exquisite rhymes and imagery. So wonderful, a win for sure. A real blessing to read ~ John

Caren Krutsinger

August 5, 2020 at 9:24 PM

" Death could be a passenger you'd meet someday approaching your ship on a taciturn bay," This made me realize how careful you are to always choose the right words. If you edit anything, please leave this as is.

Anne-Lise Andresen

August 3, 2020 at 1:23 AM

- A wonderful poem, for this contest Aditi - Many unique lines ... and verse number two is my favorite ... but I love the whole poem - I have no idea for this contest ... yet ... maybe it will come - Best wishes to you :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)