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Last Words

Before your flesh melts away
Before your eyes lose their sight
Before your lips stop moving
Before your last breath of life

Take in your last morning sunrise
Feel your last warm embrace
Hear your last sweet melody
Smell your last flower bouquet

Taste now, your final meal, partake 
Before you are taken away, post haste
To face your death, you won't escape
The executioner's hand of fate.



Written on 7/1/3015

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Robert Lindley Date: 8/5/2015 7:50:00 PM Lovely, promising but then dark at the end.. I like that, a smooth transition, superb writing my friend. A7 Login to Reply

Kelly Crenshaw Date: 7/10/2015 9:42:00 PM Beautiful and suddenly foreboding. Then sobering. A soft kiss followed by slap ending with a left hook. The soft kiss was memorable. Lol. I really liked thisun Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 7/10/2015 10:37:00 PM Thank you, Kelly, for stopping by and reading my poem. I'm glad you were intrigued by it.

Peter Lewis Holmes Date: 7/6/2015 5:41:00 PM I enjoyed the way you have structured this poem...it pricked my emotions... I would take out the final line though...no need to state the obvious..."prose explains, poetry states"...nice write Laura and thanks for the comment ...Peter. Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 7/1/2015 5:02:00 AM Laura, this is a well written piece. This thought provking write held my attention from the beginning until end.Excellent job:-) Alexis Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 7/1/2015 11:47:00 AM Thank you, Alexis! I really appreciate that you were drawn into the poem, as I was hoping to create that effect.

Afolabi Muideen Date: 7/1/2015 3:36:00 AM Powerful well written Laura,it is extremely fascinating I like its first stanza and the last three lines, it expressed a lot and excellent write for this insight penned...........A.M. Login to Reply Laura Leiser Date: 7/1/2015 11:45:00 AM Thank you, Afolabi. I wanted to repeat words throughout the poem for emphasis, and I'm glad you liked it!