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*Image of Nursing Home provided by Pixabay. Just Stating The Obvious Poetry Contest Poetic Form: Rhyme PLACE: Hereafter Harmony House (Assisted Living Facility) Morning ushered chairs align the walls blanketed legs with tabled meal trays infirm progress neath Andy Warhol's. A chambered room fills every which way those ably walks passing out game cards help checkers rounds, the game is in play. Most play onward while others do naught some just sit there, a few simply talk while bingo goes on, helpers will spot. A blank gaze onward, a blind man feels his fingers balter a page of braille while edged lips rise and a smile reveals. Hue balls tumble, a number is said it goes till one or more says BINGO winners got gifts, games till lunch is spread. TV is watched by the non-sleepers wheelers part ways, escape to their rooms prop up on beds made by housekeepers. Incessant tapping, a hallway clears an attentive dog nudge e'er so oft side partner pleased, loyal all these years. After their dinner and no caffeine long distant talks with family ties blissful hearts, sleepy-eyed and serene. 2021 May 09 *1st Place* 'ALL YOURS(May 21)' ~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 May 21 *1st Place* Just Stating The Obvious Poetry Contest ~~Brother Jacob: Judged 2021 May 18

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/21/2021 1:15:00 PM

This winning poem is brilliantly written William! You have opened our eyes to the reality of life in a nursing home. My daughter is a nurse and worked in a nursing hospital for over ten years. She used to bring in her own DVD movies to help entertain the patients and they really appreciated movie night. Congratulations on your deserving win. Blessings and Aloha, Connie xxoo

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/21/2021 3:26:00 PM

I spent a day with our neighbor of long ago ere his passing, the impetus of my writing, I'm envious of the spiritual strength that sustains your daughter daily. It didn't bother me that he slept in his wheelchair e'er so oft while there, for it allowed me to reminisce when he was young and I younger, as well as, observe the returning smiles all around. I'm delightfully pleased with your heartfelt share, Connie, Aloha nui!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/21/2021 11:08:00 AM

Congratulations!

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/21/2021 2:57:00 PM

Thanks, Christuraj, welcoming always, Aloha!

Kim Merryman

Date: 5/20/2021 3:19:00 PM

A real look at a day in assisted living. Well written. Congrats on your 1st place win, William! Blessings, Kim M

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/20/2021 3:22:00 PM

Your kindheartedness is illuminated by your words, Kim, thank you, Aloha!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/20/2021 4:01:00 AM

Wonderful writing. I enjoyed this. We all get old sometime if we live. God bless you always and congrats. Love, Gina

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/20/2021 9:02:00 AM

Thanks, Gina, for your caring expressions, I appreciate you my friend, Aloha!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 5/19/2021 10:03:00 PM

William, you’ve taken us through a day in the life at an assisted living facility. Superb write; congrats on your win!

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/19/2021 10:40:00 PM

Your defining words are well received my friend, thank you for extending your read with this thoughtful share, Aloha!

Beata Agustin

Date: 5/19/2021 12:18:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this grim-reality-exposing muse of through your awesome poetic style. God bless you.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/19/2021 1:23:00 AM

I gratefully appreciate your illuminating the realities of life's reach, Beata, thank you, Aloha!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/18/2021 9:06:00 PM

This is so descriptive and a unique take on the contest theme, William, congratulations:)

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/18/2021 9:47:00 PM

Thanks, Jo, 'twas my last visit with my much older friend. Knowing his failing health, I spent that entire day till closing, even tho' he slept for a while at the end--you are appreciated my friend, Aloha!

Eve Roper

Date: 5/18/2021 11:30:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Brother Jacob's contest, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/18/2021 9:43:00 PM

Thanks, Eve, if one overdoes the PS page, the 'message holding' icon disappears if it's not reviewed at the start--thought to share, Aloha!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/18/2021 9:13:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A true story for many. A wonderful write. Have a blessed day..............

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/18/2021 9:59:00 AM

Thank you, Paula, as this is my shared reflection of my last visit with my older friend, it was a blessed day my friend, Aloha!

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 5/18/2021 8:48:00 AM

Told just as it is, isn’t it wonderful such places exist for those in need of compassionate care and companionship. Congratulations on your win William… Belle

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/18/2021 9:50:00 AM

A beautiful endearment of words, Belle, on my days' reflection spent with a friend who was my senior, for the last time. It was an enjoyable day for memories my friend, Aloha!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/11/2021 11:55:00 PM

So Nice!

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/12/2021 12:07:00 AM

Much thanks, Christuraj, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/10/2021 4:31:00 PM

you painted the perfect picture of a not so perfect life style. I have visited them a few times like to sing Xmas Carols, etc. It's so sad the ones in there who have no family or visitors. Very nicely done, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/10/2021 5:10:00 PM

My last visit with my older friend, from morning till visiting hour ended at 8 pm, I wrote what I saw since he mostly slept in his wheelchair. Just being by his side, not knowing it'll be our last, until we meet again--Andrea, you are a dear, Aloha!

L Milton Hankins

Date: 5/9/2021 4:54:00 PM

Attention-getting look inside the nursing home, where many readers have never been. It is generally a busy place, especially for those who are able to move around and visit the game rooms, etc. Thanks, William, for sharing this.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/9/2021 5:03:00 PM

That it is, Milt, as I've just mentioned my friend who's my senior in years, hadn't much time so I spent a day there with him sharing our last memories together -- I am blessed to share this, my friend, Aloha!

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/9/2021 4:09:00 PM

Great story, William, even if it is a heart tugger. I hope you had a great weekend.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/9/2021 4:55:00 PM

I'm still blissful, Daniel, not sleepy-eyed yet -- still sunny, I had spent a day there with a friend who has long passed, enjoy my friend, Aloha!