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Just Over the Hill

And then I seen it, whilst looking down from a high A peaceful uniform land, where residents don’t cry Equal to all, perhaps finely embellished with love Diagonal lines appear, as I descend from above People stand about randomly, in a mysterious world As this endless field of monoliths, now slowly unfurls Only place where nobody, yet everybody gets along It’s not utopia, but could well be, when we’re gone A BRIAN STRAND PREMIERE CHOICE Sponsored by Brian Strand 06/01/22

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Sotto Poet

Date: 6/2/2022 4:53:00 PM

David, your poetry is quite well-crafted. In the living world, such a location is virtually impossible to identify. You used the graveyard's pattern and equality to depict such a sad but figuratively meaningful setting.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/3/2022 12:59:00 AM

Thank you Lasaad, I’m afraid for the vast majority of people around the world, the only place that will come close to a utopia, with equality and unity is indeed their resting place in the cemetery, a sad reflection on mankind, cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/1/2022 7:38:00 PM

Who knows where we will be heading, and if it is a utopian situation perhaps we have found an intense feeling of love which will spread around, and we will want to stay because we might as well if we are in the only place where people do get on - Let the others go who cant get on with each other. Hope this comment makes sense! Love and hugs, Jennifer

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/2/2022 12:56:00 AM

Heya Jennifer, your comment makes perfect sense, alas such a place is difficult or impossible to find whilst in the living world, so I used the imagery of the graveyards symmetry and equality to portray such a place, I know that sounds quiet dark, but it’s just metaphoric, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Deb M

Date: 6/1/2022 12:29:00 AM

I really like this David…has that element of the unknown ….mystery. Debx

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/1/2022 1:34:00 AM

Thank you Deb, that’s exactly what I was trying to achieve, somewhere peaceful, between life and death, no better place than the approach from the hill down to the cemetery when I go to visit loved ones graves, cheers David