Joshua '08

I was born four months after;
Brother Joshua passed.
Mummy’s angel allowed no space,
For me to nuzzle on breast.
But, he lay beside me every night,
Waiting for her to stir.
Only we know she never came.
I have Daddy’s eyes.
Who’s eyes did Mummy see, 
As you gazed your last?
Daddy’s baby girl left no room for grief,
Inside his mending heart.
But Mummy wept,
And her tears still stain our blankets.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008


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Date: 5/22/2009 11:44:00 AM
The you in line 4..is who? (Joshua? perhaps he..would be better?mirroring the ..me) break at before "I have"..sorry I not sure who died? I first thought it the boy and then the Dad?..need to make the pronouns clear who is being spoken about? Light & Love
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Date: 12/11/2008 6:33:00 AM
Thank u- I've been here since the beginning just took a break away during the change over!! :-) As for grief none of mine in the above just looking back and understanding the grief of others. I was born four months after my brother died-too late to join the grief party unfortunately-but quick enough to be engulfed by the aftermath! thanx for all ur encouraging comments, i'm off to read some of ur pieces-please feel free to really critique any of my work.
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Date: 12/9/2008 5:17:00 AM
Heartbreaking... grief often allows us to be at our most expressive. This is poignant, sad... and magnificent. Best wishes, Keith (PS welcome to the Soup!)
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