Jaundiced

Slightly yellow I Awaken in an ice bath Without kidneys.

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Skat A

Date: 5/10/2015 12:22:00 PM

Uwe, lol, this reminds me of Charlie the unicorn. Who woke up with no kidney... It's a cartoon... He wakes and yells.. "Hey Someone took my kidney." LOL... on a not laughing matter. It is a dark side on the underground market. Jaundice is not good...SKAT

Funom Makama

Date: 11/25/2014 8:20:00 AM

A Lovely poem. I'm refreshed reading through your lines.Thanks for the share. Definitely a 7

David Meade

Date: 11/13/2014 6:15:00 AM

I was shocked by the last line . . . but then thought . . . that was the whole point of the poem -- nicely done, I love surprised ending and the yellow and ice set me for your powerful finish!