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Jane My Lover

She was a beautiful lady, beautiful from beautiful. very kind and smart, attractive to everyone. My lover my sweet,my pleasure. I loved her as I loved my self. One day, I went with her to enjoy life, at a certain beach.When we reached there, the condition was good. We ate, we drank, we spent the day together. We enjoyed our leisure together. At the end of the day, we decided to have an evening walk around the beach. As a result, we became tied and decided to sleep. During the midnight, I went to the nearby hotel, I booked a single bedroom where we slept. Unfortunetely, I started dreaming. My mouth became dry and the throat at large. My eyes turned red and painful. I got a serious headache and the temperature raised. I called her, Jane...Jane, assist me. I wasn't hearing anything from her. I tried to look around the bed, it was an empty bed. I cried, when I was crying, I saw a big snake coming over the bed. I jumped and screemed. Really, Jane my lover was a mere spirit. Men and women,be careful when looking for partners.I was dying, and I will never do it again to be an easy goer. Goodbye Jane, I will never forget you. Jane my lover was a real spirit, which I will never forget. Had it been a spirit, Jane my lover would have been a nightdancer.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2005




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Date: 8/31/2010 5:26:00 PM
It is free verse. Yet you need to use more metaphor & simile & alliteration, this will help you. An eerie experience you had there! Light & Love
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