Jagged Claws

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Stealing what daylight won, grey clouds evoke despair choking a waning sun. A dullness dims the air, and flower petals close in order to prepare. Bruised indigo splotches, dapple diminished blues with dark purple blotches. Flashing within the gloom lightning intensifies, with a thunderous boom. And its jagged claws scratch at the air in the sky, searching out drops to snatch. But, such strikes are in vain, electrical talons can not grasp drops of rain.

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Anna Hopper

Date: 8/13/2018 11:57:00 AM

New fav

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/13/2018 12:45:00 PM

Thanks so much Anna, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/12/2018 11:29:00 PM

Astounding alliteration -"And brindled bruised splotches dapple diminished blues with dark purple blotches." So well done!

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/13/2018 10:37:00 AM

Thanks so much Caren, as always I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 8/12/2018 12:11:00 AM

'...its jagged eyes search for drops to snatch...' I love this line. A very dynamic poem throughout, fave.

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/12/2018 8:44:00 AM

Thank you so much Lawrence, as always I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.

Carole Duet

Date: 8/11/2018 10:41:00 PM

Great poem, Emile...perfectly describes a storm. Love it.

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/12/2018 8:43:00 AM

Thanks Carole, as always I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Carole Duet
Date: 8/11/2018 10:50:00 PM

Great poem, Emile...perfectly describes a storm. I especially like the comparison of the lightening and thunder (personification?) to an eagle or falcon etc. FAVED because I love a good storm! lol

Line Gauthier

Date: 8/11/2018 9:36:00 PM

Well done, Emile. I love your last stanza.