Into a Daydream

Our lady cashier, Karen, daydreamed again right past me in a nearby grocery , her fingers fumbling over my selection of cold cuts, bagels,and lemon powder while a haze seemed to grasp her thoughts under some frozen moment of autistic innocence like a crystallized trance. So I followed her inside a dreamscape while Karen narrated this countless parade of jays hovering above a sea of orange dahlias . In a flash, she mumbled about Einstein, asking this man, " Oh, did your growth hormone intake work based on relativity's law?" Gently, from a distance , she relayed how Joplin wept, tending children in a monastery--- an abstract recording through Karen's uncut version of life's tinges. Faltering in her own universe, she lisped a melody, "If this were truly heaven, then death would be it's own reward." And this lady gently fixed her tidy uniform, then peered into my eyes ...unseen by anyone except myself in the din of late afternoon. " Oh it's you, "Will that be paid in cash, through coupons or credit card?" Smiling, I gave some money and walked away... moved by this rare instance of naturalnesss. 11/28/2016 The Best of James Tate Contest..Space Cadet

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Date: 12/9/2016 11:49:00 AM
Nette, your mind is free, and you lead us into prior unknown realms.
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Date: 12/2/2016 5:41:00 PM
You captured his style well. Go get your Pulitzer Prize. This deserves it. Should have been higher placement. Congratulations.
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Date: 12/1/2016 11:59:00 PM
Great poem, Nette, and congratulations!
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Date: 12/1/2016 10:35:00 PM
Great poem, Nette Onclaud. Thank you for sharing and congrats in the contest. -- Wesley C.
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Date: 11/28/2016 2:10:00 PM
A great poem. You got into and experience with a distracted cashier well.
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Date: 11/28/2016 7:48:00 AM
Way out of this world!. Imaginings or daydreaming makes us totally different from others. Seeing the beauty in a person's ' crazed' musings is pretty awesome!
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Date: 11/28/2016 7:15:00 AM
I am at awe . The pulse of your abstract poetry is dizzying and at the same time filled with meaning. Touched by how you traveled with this lady to find beauty in her idiosyncrasy.
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Date: 11/27/2016 5:41:00 PM
So very creative, amazing!
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