Internally Torn

I can’t eat nor sleep,
She took what matters the most;
Reflection of me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Augustus Avatar
May 4, 2009 at 2:51 PM
Nice! I really like this. It's awesome to see three lines be powerful.
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April 30, 2009 at 1:17 PM
Much said in just three lines, leaving the reader with something to ponder. Interesting end to this poem. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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April 27, 2009 at 10:42 PM
Would the "reflection" by a child? You say a lot here in just three lines. When a love leaves our life, we feel the disruption in ordinary activities like eating or sleeping, but eventually (as Raul said) the appetite returns. Excellent Senryu, Tyler! Best wishes, Carolyn
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April 27, 2009 at 10:02 PM
I have felt similar feelings and in time I regained my hunger. I love the last line, the reference is strong, perhaps a seed...Raul
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